Penguins in Moscow
I think about this every winter day.
When the winter comes, it brings lots of people to the underground. Citizens prefer use the metro instead of car, because in winter you should spend a lot of time to: warm an engine, shovel away snow, stuck in traffic jam. It is not fun: the sun raises only in about 9 a.m. and till this time you reminds a zombie, because your organism do not want you to wake up in night, when there is no light.
Well, a crowd of zombies go to the carriage. Everybody is silent, all of them looks into the void and you can see anger in their sleepy eyes. Finally comes the moment when you need change the line. You go out and flow of people brings you to the escalator. There is also a crowd, so you starts looking at the escalator, this great machine, which rises up and up. And you see: people behave like penguins. They want to go faster, but it is not possible, and they impatiently move with small steps. They are swinging, and this is what penguins do.
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Penguins in Moscow
I think about this every winter day.When the winter comes, it brings lots of people to the underground. Citizens prefer to use the metro instead of a/the car, because in winter you should spend a lot of time to: warming the engine, shovelling away snow and being stuck in traffic jams. It is not fun; the sun rises only in at about 9 a.m and until this time you resemble a zombie, because your body does not want you to wake up in the night, when there is no light.
Well, a crowd of zombies go into the carriage. Everybody is silent, all of them looks into the void and you can see anger in their sleepy eyes. Finally comes the moment when you need change the lines. You go out and the flow of people brings you to the escalator. There is also a crowd, so you start looking at the escalator, this great machine, which rises up and up. And you see: people behave like penguins. They want to go faster, but it is not possible, and they impatiently move with small steps. They are swaying, and this is what penguins do.
A few small corrections but well written and easy to understand!
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Penguins in Moscow
I think about this every winter day.When the winter comes, it brings lots of people to the underground. Citizens prefer to use the metro instead of the car, because in winter you need to spend a lot of time to: warm the engine, shovel away snow, be stuck in a traffic jam. It is not fun: the sun rises about 9 a.m. and until then you resemble a zombie, because your organism does not want you to wake up at night when it is dark.
Well, a crowd of zombies goes into the carriage. Everybody is silent, each looks into the void and you can see anger in their sleepy eyes. Finally comes the moment when you need change the line. You go out and the flow of people pushes you to the escalator. This is also crowded, so you start looking at the escalator, this great machine, rising up and up. And you see people behave like penguins. They want to go faster, but it is not possible, and they impatiently move with small steps. They are waddling, and this is what penguins do.
Very well written!
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