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traffic accidents With more and more severe social competition in the modern society, it is inevitable that people need to drink alcohol at some occasions to build up relationships with business partners, especially in the metropolitans like Beijing and shanghai. In addition, when drivers were driving in some familiar roads, they didn’t pay enough attention to it, which posed a grave threat to pedestrians’ safe. Moreover, people’s weak safe awareness is another significant factor that we can not ignore. Many of pedestrians are often distracted by their mobile phones instead of focusing on the transport situation.

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Traffic Accidents

With more and more severe stronger and stronger (severe is only used with very serious situations. The consequences of the competition are severe [the drinking and then driving] but the competition itself isn't severe)social competition in the ('society' usually does not have 'the' before it)modern society, it is inevitable that people need to drink alcohol at on some occasions to build up relationships with business partners, especially in the metropolitans a metropolis like Beijing and or Shanghai. In addition, when drivers were driving drive on in some familiar roads, they didn’t don't pay enough attention to it, which poses a grave threat to pedestrians’ safety(here, if I am correct with what you want to say, you should use present tense for this sentence because you are talking about a general rule/hypothesis). Moreover, people ’s weak safe awareness not paying attention to their own safety is another significant factor that we can not ignore. Many of pedestrians are often distracted by their mobile phones instead of focusing on the transport situation.

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