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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.In recent times the health of many countries has declined and that in turn has raised the awareness of a large number of people who are getting more concerned about this issue. Some people believe that the most effective way is to raise the number of sports facilities to help public health. Although, others say that this will have less effect on public health and other factors are needed. In this essay, I will look at both sides of the argument and give my opinion.
There is a common belief that it is better to raise the number of sports equipment to improve public health. There are certainly many logical reasons to support this. When people see lots of sports facilities around them and there are easy to reach local centres, this encourages them to do sports. They do not need to waste their time and money to go to some specific areas to do exercise. Moreover, regular exercise is essential in maintaining a healthy body and exercise burns calories and helps to build healthy bones and muscles. So, installing exercise equipment in parks is good way to motivate the majority to do sports.
By contrast, it is often argued that building some sport facilities in the community would not be effective without changing people's lifestyle. These days most people tend to walk less and do desk jobs and stressful work. Most adults relax by watching television and eating fast food that causes many dangerous diseases such as obesity, diabetes and heart attack. Children play video games rather than doing outdoor sports. As a result most people lead a sedentary lifestyle and they should change their lifestyle and eating habits to have a healthy body.
To sum up, some people claim that you can create an environment of courage, sportsmanship and public health by adding more sports facilities but others believe that it would have small effect. In my opinion, I believe installing more sports facilities in residential areas and changing bad habits is very helpful to improve public health.
Hello Ghasal,
Another good essay, structure is fine and it follows a solid format, several spelling mistakes and a few grammar mistakes spoil the effect.
Bob
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