Insania sanus's notebook entry: Apr 22, 2011 parts of a story I am writing
(*note*: the part are not in ordered, since i write the parts random, and sorry for any spelling mistakes)
I journey to a place with in darkness, that is now to late to go back, in order to step back into the light. I have to abandon many things. My friends, my relations, the very man that I am, MY OWN PRIDE and NAME! For I am no longer human, I have lost my faith, there for I am dead or maybe I am the very evil that i did a frau. I created a demon. That has ruined lifes and stode between the very love that two poeple hold toward each other
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Make sure you use periods . to end sentences and not commas ,
I journey to a place within darkness. It is now to late to go back. In order to step back into the light, (changed to a comma) I have to abandon many things: my friends, my relations, the very man that I am, MY OWN PRIDE and NAME! For I am no longer human. I have lost my faith. Therefore I am dead, (added comma) or maybe I am the very evil that i did a frau (I'm not familiar with this word or phrase...). I created a demon that has ruined lives and stood between the very love that two poeple held toward each other.
Hope that helps!
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yes and yep
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aha, you are writing a story? So it is a tragic one?
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