Little tour Last week,I went to shanghai for my little tour,because I didn't have too much money,so I chose took train to there,the first thing I did after I arrived ,is found a hotel to live for nigh

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Little tour Last week,I went to shanghai for my little tour,because I didn't have too much money,so I chose took train to there,the first thing I did after I arrived ,is found a hotel to live for night,then I went to Chenghuang Temple,because it is not very far away from the hotel,Shanghai local small commodity wholesale market in the Temple,and cheaper prices.the next day I went to The Oriental Pearl TV Tower,even it rained that day,but still many people in there. We have a lots beautiful city,even though they are not famous like Shanghai,but still have their unique beauty,hope more people can found it. Please help correct mistakes,thanks very much

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Little tour

Last week I went for a tour to Shanghai. I didn't have much money so I took train. The first thing I did after I arrived was find a hotel for the night, then I went to the Chenghuang Temple because it is not far from the hotel. Shanghai has a local small commodity wholesale market in the Temple where items are cheaper. The next day I went to The Oriental Pearl TV Tower and even though it rained that day there were still many people there.
We have lots of beautiful citie and even though they are not famous like Shanghai, they still have their unique beauty. I wish more people could see it.

Little trip.

Last week, I went to Shanghai for a little trip. Because I didn't have too much money,so I chose took the train there, the first thing I did after I arrived, was to find a hotel to stay for the night. Then I went to Chenghuang Temple because it is not very far away from the hotel. Shanghai has a small local commodity wholesale market in the Temple and cheaper prices. The next day I went to The Oriental Pearl TV Tower, even though it rained that day there were still many people in there.
We have a lot of beautiful cities, even though they are not famous like Shanghai, but they still have their unique beauty. I hope more people can find them.

Please help correct mistakes, thanks very much.

Hello Chunyu Ma,

It sounds like you had a good stay in Shanghai.

Remember in English that there is always a space after full stops and commas, and a new sentence always begins with a capital (big) letter. Be careful with sentence structure, you normally don't have to many clauses in a sentence, it is better to have shorter sentences.

Best wishes

Bob

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