In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon.
Nowadays, people have a longer life spans than ever before. Since human experienced industrialization, our technology in various fields has got great improvements, ranging from entertainment to medicine treatment, making people become healthier mentally and physically. In my opinions, the most important reasons why people are living longer is medical care, safety of transportation, and foods.
No one can deny advancement of medical care plays a significant role in longevity. A majority of diseases that could not be treated/ were considered fatal in the past can be cured today. During a long time of researches of medicine, our doctors become more professional, and technology of medicine becomes more advanced.In addition, because of convenient medical service, more illnesses can be detected at an earlier stage. Therefore, people are suffering from fewer diseases and are living longer now.(The better detection and treatment enable people’s longer life.)
(Years ago, doctors only knew about the most basic diseases and treatments. people could die from something as simple as an infection from a cut. Now, we have antibiotics and other medicines to help cure infection.)
Apart from medicine, the transportation is safer and faster. In ancient time, people went out by horses or camels, which were not safe at all. Those animals sometimes got bad temper, which would hurt riders. Or the terrain was too complicated to be overcame by those animals. However, with the development of human society, automobiles, bullet trains and airplanes came to our lives, and totally changed the means of our transportation. Our transportation is up to a higher safety level and thereby, fewer accidents happen.
Last but not least, foods. In recent days, people get so many different ways to protect foods from spoiling. For example, freezers/ refrigerators help us restore our foods so that we can eat them after a couple of days. Or microwaves can heat foods more conveniently. Or liquid detergents are excellent cleansers to make our dishes clean and stay away from bacteria. However, ancient people did not have these machines for food preparation or cleansers for food cleanness, so they got a higher possibility to eat dirty food or get infection of bacteria.
To sum up, people really get so many benefits from current technology: advanced medicine treatment, safer transportation and foods free of more kinds of bacteria(the quality of food). Generally, we are living longer now.
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In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon.
Nowadays, people have longer life spans than ever before. Since humans experienced industrialization, our technology in various fields has got great improvements, ranging from entertainment to medical treatment, making people healthier mentally and physically. In my opinion, the most important reasons why people are living longer is medical care, safety of transportation, and food.No one can deny that advancing medical care plays a significant role in longevity. The majority of diseases (that could not be treated = were considered fatal in the past) can be cured today. After many years of research, our doctors have become more professional, and medicine has advanced. In addition, because of convenient medical services, more illnesses can be detected at an earlier stage. Therefore, people are suffering from fewer diseases and are living longer now. (Better detection and treatment enables people to live longer.)
(Years ago, doctors only knew about the most basic diseases and treatments. People could die from something as simple as an infection from a cut. Now, we have antibiotics and other medicines to help cure infection.)
Apart from medicine, transportation is safer and faster. In ancient times, people went by horses or camels, which were not safe at all. Those animals sometimes got bad tempered and hurt their riders. Or the terrain was too complicated to be overcome by those animals. However, with the development of human society, automobiles, bullet trains and airplanes came to our lives, and totally changed the means of our transportation. Our transportation is more safe now and therefore fewer accidents happen.
Last but not least, foods. In recent years, people have found so many different ways to protect foods from spoiling. For example, freezers/ refrigerators help us restore our foods so that we can eat them after a couple of days. Or microwaves can heat foods more conveniently. Or liquid detergents are excellent cleansers to make our dishes clean and free from bacteria. However, ancient people did not have these machines for food preparation or cleansers for food cleanness, so they were more likely to eat dirty food or get bacterial infections.
To sum up, people really get so many benefits from current technology: advanced medical treatment, safer transportation and foods free of many more kinds of bacteria. Generally we are living longer now.
Very well written!
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