some people doubt whether young people should do various activities or fouse on one activity
With the development of the economy, people gradually keep their life from starvation and fouse more attention on the education, especially the education of their children, so doing various activities or fousing on one activity becomes a question for parents.Personally, I think it is the kids' best interest to get involved in different kinds of activities based on the following reasons.
Admittedly, fousing on one activity means the children will have more time and energy to devote into it and children will have a deeper understanding and more knowledge about it, so that they can have a good performance on the one activity than other children who don't devote into in. Nonetheless, fousing on one activity, at the same time,means giving up other opportunities to explore other activities, taking my friend Make for an example, his parents let him play the piano since he was a little boy, and asked him to put all his free time to practise it, and he also got some small rewards in the domestic competition, but he feels too tired and upset to play the piano now. So making children experience various activities not only helps them to find the activities that are most suitable for them, but it can also let them to tap their unknow potential.
Moreover,children can develop many useful skills and release their pressure in life and study if they do different activities, for example, playing basketball can hlep them to have a healthy body to meet the challenges in the future and develop cooperation awareness. The healthy body and awareness can help them to prepare well for future jobs since healthy and cooperation is regarded as a very valuable for the future working environment.Plus, having art activities will help children to cultivate their characteristic and enhance their artistic taste, it will make children more sensitive to the beauty and evil in the world and appreciate those beautiful things in a better way.
In conclusion, it is better for young people to do various activities since it not only helps them to explore their interest and find their true love, but also helps them to develop useful skills and make great preparations for the future jobs.
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Some people doubt whether young people should do various activities or focus on one activity
With the development of the economy, people gradually keep their lives from starvation and focus more attention on (the) education, especially the education of their children, so doing various activities or focusing on one activity becomes a question for parents. Personally, I think it is the kids' best interest to get involved in different kinds of activities based on the following reasons.Admittedly, focusing on one activity means that (the) children will have more time and energy to devote into themselves to it and children will have a deeper understanding and more knowledge about it, so that they can have a good performance on the one activity than other children who don't devote into themselves to it. Nonetheless, focusing on one activity, at the same time, means giving up/missing other opportunities to explore other activities/interests, taking my friend Make for an example/as an example. His parents let him play the piano since he was a little boy, and asked him to put all his free time to practicing it, and he also (/of course) got some small rewards in the domestic competition, but he feels too tired and upset to play the piano now. So making children experience various activities not only helps them (to) find the activities that are the most suitable for them, but it can also let them (without: to) tap their unknow potential.
Moreover, children can develop many useful skills and release their pressure in life and study if they do different activities, for example, playing basketball can help them (to) have a healthy body to meet the challenges in the future and develop cooperation awareness. The healthy body and awareness can help them (to) prepare well for future jobs since health and cooperation is regarded as a very valuable thing for the future working environment. Plus, having art activities will help children (to) cultivate their characteristics and enhance their artistic taste, it will make children more sensitive to the beauty and evil in the world and appreciate those beautiful things in a better way.
In conclusion, it is better for young people to do various activities since it not only helps them (to) explore their interests and find their true love, but also helps them (to) develop useful skills and make great preparations for the future jobs.
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I really like your entry. And sorry for my incorrect corrections.
I hope the native speakers will correct it soon.
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I also think that while children go to school they need to develop themselves comprehensively; doing sports, playing some musical instrument, mingle with art people, and so on. In some time it will dawn on them what they want not just to do for living, but what they want to make their lives with.
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