Friendship is important part in my life
In our life, we will build many kinds of relationship with lots of people, like love, friendship,neighbors and so on. For myself, friendship is very import part. In high school, I made a few very good friends, we were all 16,17 years old girls in that time. We study together,play together, even live together. After graduated from high school, we joined different university in different city. Although we can't stay in the same place, but we still share our life through telephone and network. I am appreciate to meet and make friends with them, when I was down and feel lonely in a unfamiliar city, they gave me power and encourage, let me feel warm. Time goes by, our friendship will be more and more deep.
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Friendship is an important part of my life (or you could say Friendship is important in my life)
In our life, we will build many kinds of relationships with lots of people, like love, friendship,neighbors and so on. For myself, friendship is a very import part. In high school, I made a few very good friends. We were all 16,17 years old girls in that time. We studied together, played together, even lived together. After graduating from high school, we joined different universities in different cities. Although we can't stay in the same place, but we still share our life through telephone and network. I am appreciate meeting and making friends with them. When I was down and feeling lonely in an unfamiliar city, they gave me power and encouragement, and let me feel warm. As time goes by, our friendship will become more and more deep.--------
This was very nicely written. Most of my suggestions are just little things about the tense of the verbs and using plural when talking about multiple things. Of course English is different from Chinese in this regard, so this is understandable. One more thing: when you say "Although ... but ..." (虽然 ... 但是) this actually is ok in English but it usually feels a little more natural to leave out the "but".
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