Writing poetry in a second language (Spanish)
So, I studied creative writing at university (in English), and one of my main goals from learning Spanish has been to be able to use it poetically. I've been learning for 18 months, but really taken it more seriously in the last 6 weeks and began studying. Here is my first poem in Spanish...
Ella tiene los ojos marrones,
la piel de oliva, canciones,
serán susurradas
cuando está cansada
Para poner amor en sus sueños
a diferencia del anterior dueño.
Pero que piensa cuando se da cuenta al despertar de que me fui?
Le perdí?
Decidiría cantar también cuando se despierta...
All corrections and opinions are most welcome!
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Writing poetry in a second language (Spanish)
So, I studied creative writing at university (in English), and one of my main goals from learning Spanish has been to be able to use it poetically. I've been learning for 18 months, but really taken it more seriously in the last 6 weeks and began studying. Here is my first poem in Spanish...Ella tiene los ojos marrones (está excelente, pero en un sentido poético podrías usar "Ella tiene ojos color café"), la piel de oliva.
Canciones serán susurradas cuando esté cansada, para poner amor en sus sueños, a diferencia del anterior dueño.
¿Pero, qué pensará cuando se da cuenta al despertar de que me fui? ¿Lo perdí?
Decidiría cantar, también, cuando se despierta...
All corrections and opinions are most welcome!
Hi Joseph,
You did a terrific job.
It's very interesting how you play with the words. And even more interesting what your profession is.
By the way, really nice poem, if you have questions, feel free for making them.
P.S: I'm not a poetry specialist. But I love reading.
Saludos.
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