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my first day of school many events have happened in my life which i have forgotten most of them but i still remember some of them perfectly like my first day of school which was planned to familiarize first grade students with school atmosphere.as i remember it was an enjoyable day for me since caused me to find new friends and was a really different experience of school.my mother accompanied me to school as other parents.We all waited in front of the school office.Soon a teacher came and led us to our classroom.This was when some children began to cry as the parents were not allowed into the classrooms. I did not cry because I had been to kindergarten before.we spend the first hour to familiar with the teacher and our classmates and also sang songs ,then as our teacher was busy writing down the list of students we had plenty of time to ourselves.meantime some children continued to cry.soon recess came,some of us headed for the school shop while the rest headed for their parents.I bought chocolate milk with the money that my father gave me.after recess we went back to our classroom and me and my new friend tried to calm 2 girls who were still crying,after a few minutes we did it they stop crying.and we started playing and laughing.Still some parents looked in anxiously through the windows.it was an enjoyable day as i fined my best friend in this they.it was a new experience for me to be out far away from my family for more than 4 hours and communicate with new people .my heart still be full of joy when i think of that they.,

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My First Day of School

Many events have happened in my life. I have forgotten most of them, but I still remember some of them perfectly, like my first day of school. It was planned to familiarize first grade students with the school atmosphere. As I remember it was an enjoyable day for me since it caused me to find new friends and it was a really different experience for me. My mother accompanied me to school as did other parents. We all waited in front of the school office. Soon a teacher came and led us to our classroom. This was when some children began to cry as the parents were not allowed into the classrooms. I did not cry because I had been to kindergarten before. We spent the first hour  becoming familiar with the teacher and our classmates, and we also sang songs. Then as our teacher was busy writing down the list of students, we had plenty of time to ourselves. In the meantime some children continued to cry. Soon recess came, and some of us headed for the school shop while the rest headed for their parents. I bought chocolate milk with the money that my father gave me. After recess we went back to our classroom and my new friend and I tried to calm two girls who were still crying. After a few minutes we did it they did stop crying, and we started playing and laughing. Some parents still looked in anxiously through the windows. It was an enjoyable day as I found my best friend that day. It was a new experience for me to be out far away from my family for more than four hours and to communicate with new people. My heart is still full of joy when I think of that day.


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