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Essay correction (traditions die out as a result of technology development) TOPIC: When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? The world is continuously changing and technological advancement, that is coming as a result of science development, makes many modern occupations unnecessary. Although some people are certain that globalisation is a process that influences economies of all countries around the world, bringing them elaboration and prosperity, I strongly believe that nations should keep and transfer to the next generations all skills and characteristics of their native culture. There is no doubt that technology allows modern people to have a more comfortable lifestyle, easier access to education, health, and other social services. Certain occupations, especially those related to traditional culture, are playing a decorative role in contemporary societies. For example, many traditional cuisine eateries were replaced by fast food restaurants, as well as small local grocery stores were replaced by large supermarkets. International products, that offered for cheaper prices, are making local crafts unaffordable luxury. Despite obvious benefits that global economy and science development have brought to the contemporary society, I strongly advocate against the disappearance of identity and unique cultures of countries around the world. I believe that variety of opinions and multiculturalism keeps our civilisation development process going on. Moreover, traditional cultures inspire creativity and provide the necessary basis for our ethical and moral values. Traditional skills help to keep cultures alive, therefore, mistakes that were made by previous generations, would not be made again. It is evident, that globalisation processes that are happening around the world as a result of technology development, allow nations to receive sufficient results in all areas of life and most importantly, in communities social support services. However, in pursuit of happiness that comfortable life brings, people lose their traditional skills, unique cultures, and memories that should be transferred from generation to generation. Therefore, the ability to survive as a nation dies out with the disappearance of culture.

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The world is continuously changing and technological advancement, that is coming as a result of science  scientifiс development, makes many modern occupations unnecessary. Although some people are certain that globalisation is a process that influences economies of all countries around the world, bringing them elaboration and prosperity, I strongly believe that nations should keep and transfer all skills and characteristics of their native culture to their next generations all skills and characteristics of their native culture.

There is no doubt that technology allows modern people to have a more comfortable lifestyle, easier access to education, health, and other social services. Certain occupations, especially those related to traditional culture, are playing a decorative role in contemporary societies. For example, many traditional cuisine eateries were replaced by fast food restaurants, as well as small local grocery stores were replaced by large supermarkets. International products, that offered for cheaper prices, are making local crafts unaffordable luxury.


Despite obvious benefits that global economy and science  scientific development have brought to the contemporary society, I strongly advocate against the disappearance (personally I would use word extinction here) of identity and unique cultures of countries around the world. I believe that variety of opinions and multiculturalism keeps our civilisation development process going on. Moreover, traditional cultures inspire creativity and provide the necessary basis for our ethical and moral values. Traditional skills help to keep cultures alive, therefore, mistakes that were made by previous generations, would not be made again.


It is evident, that globalisation processes that are happening around the world as a result of technologicy development, allow nations to receive sufficient results in all areas of life and most importantly, in communities social support services (in the last 4 words it is not quite clear what you mean). However, in pursuit of happiness that comfortable life brings, people lose their traditional skills, unique cultures, and memories that should be transferred from generation to generation. Therefore, the ability to survive as a nation dies out with the disappearance of culture.

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