Two Flower pots (corrections please)
It was a pleasant morning. I woke up at 7 am. As I was standing in my balcony, I looked down and I saw a boy selling adorable flowers and pots of different kinds. I was so excited to buy one. I asked my elder brother to purchase my favourite flower plant. He told me that he will take me to the big garden shop and we can have them there. He took me to a very beautiful and adorable garden. I felt like I am walking in Heaven. I chose 2 flower plants and pots for them. I was so happy and excited to have them and water them. It made my day.
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Divya, this is really well written. It's a lovely story. There are a few word choices that I'd like to suggest. See my notes at the end.
Two Flower pots (corrections please)
It was a pleasant* morning. I woke up at 7 am. As I was standing in on my balcony, I looked down and I saw a boy selling adorable** flowers and pots of different kinds. I was so excited to buy one. I asked my elder brother to purchase my favourite flower plant***. He told me that he will take me to the big garden shop and we can have purchase them there. He took me to a very beautiful and adorable**** garden. I felt like I am walking in Heaven. I chose 2 flower plants and pots for them. I was so happy and excited to have bring them home and water them. It made my day.* "Pleasant" is nice. But it's kind of vague. Was it a sunny morning? Was the air particularly crisp and fresh? What made it pleasant?
** "Adorable" is okay for a puppy or kitten or little girls' dresses. But flowers should be "lovely" or "beautiful" or if they were really amazing, you could even say "stunning."
*** What is your favorite flower? You could say "I asked my older brother to buy a (fill in the name), which is my favorite flower."
**** There's "adorable" again. Actually, I like it here more than the previous place. I can imagine an adorable garden. But I think I would just use one adjective.
By the way, another word for a garden that sells plants is a "nursery," which is kind of neat, because "nursery" also means a place were babies and small children are nurtured. ("Kindergarten" also means a "children's garden")
This was a nice story. Reading it made my day!
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Two Flower pots (corrections please)
It was a pleasant morning. I woke up at 7 am. As I was standing on my balcony, I looked down and saw a boy selling adorable flowers and pots of different kinds. I was so excited to buy one. I asked my elder brother to buy my favourite flower. He told me that he would take me to the big garden shop and we could get it there. He took me to a very beautiful and adorable garden. I felt like I was walking in heaven. I chose 2 flowers and pots for them. I was so happy and excited to have them and water them. It made my day.Very well written!
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Two Flower pots (corrections please)
It was a pleasant morning. I woke up at 7 am. As I was standing in my balcony, I looked down and I saw a boy selling adorable flowers and pots of different kinds. I was so excited to buy one. I asked my elder brother to purchase my favourite flower plant. He told me that he will take me to the big garden shop and we can have them there. He took me to a very beautiful and adorable garden. I felt like I am walking in Heaven. I chose 2 flower plants and pots for them. I was so happy and excited to have them and water them. It made my day.On my balcony
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