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Writing practice for Eiken test
It’s been a while since we last heard about the Islamic State, the terrorist group on broadcast news. In many countries around the world, especially in middle-eastern countries, a lot of assaults and terrorist activities have taken place daily.One of the reasons why these terrorist groups keep attempting such inhumane activities is because economic inequality still prevails everywhere in the world. In fact, the number of people whose daily living goes under 1 dollar is staggering. These terrorists justify their activities by claiming they are solving the economic gap. Also, they recruit the poor, especially younger generations into their militia.
The lack of education might be blamed for in that the poor are encouraged and willingly go involved into those activities. It seems that the terrorism can’t be ever eliminated unless the economic inequality is solved.
--> Lack of education may be responsible for the poor being encouraged and more willing to be involved in these kinds of activities. It seems that terrorism won't ever be eliminated unless economic inequality is solved.
However, we must strive to solve it no matter what. What concerned countries must do is firstly improve international relations. Through humane talk rather than military action despite conflict of interests, we can, for sure, improve the situation.
The process may take really a long time, but as long as we keep trying our best, the situation will improve and eventually the terrorism can be eliminated.
良くできましたね。^^ いいトピックです。
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