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Physical Appearance Hello there. I would like to talk about physical appearance; it is a quite a serious, wide and interesting theme. Out appearance if always depends from fashion. A lot of young people do with their body whatever they want – strange make up, unordinary haircut, “hipster” clothes. I don’t mean it is bad, no. I like to look at people who are not afraid to experiment with their style. But, as for me, I like to be natural, to see a pristine beauty without tattoos or fake hair/lips/nails and etc.. I like my mother’s appearance. She is middle-aged woman. She has cropped fair hair. She is also fair skinned woman and has freckles. In her 40th she looks good and young for her age. She never dresses to the nines, but she is never scruffy – dressed. I like her free, comfortable and calm style. She bares a striking resemblance with Lois from “Griffins” cartoon. She also wears glasses. So, I like her complexion and would like to have the same youthful appearance as hers. I can accept everything in people’s style, it is nice to look around and see beautiful faces and clothes, but I never accept untidiness. Disheveled hair, dirty clothes and shoes, that is awful. You don’t need to get always done up, but be clear and tidy. It would be hard of hearing if someone would say “Omg, iron up your trousers, you look like a bum!” By the way, I am also glad that spots and a HLS is popular now. I know a lot of people who lost their figures, and it was a sad sight. It is out of fashion to be overweight nowadays. But some girls don’t feel borderlines and their fight with excess weight become in anorexia. Girls, please, be careful. It is awesome to be well-build and slim, but not as thin as a Slenderman. My appearance is ordinary. I am a medium height girl with round face, I have a shoulder length hair, but they are not so thick as I want. I don’t like pigtails or ponytails, I like loose hair, unfortunately they are so unruly, so I have to find a master who can help me to never have a hair out of place. I have a beauty spot on my right cheek and two dimples when I smile. Can’t say that I always look glamorous but at least I try to be well turned up. Also, I am not scared of getting grey, because I already have three-four gray hair on my head. All what I want is to grow old gracefully. I wish everybody beautiful oldness! Thank you.

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By the way, I am also glad that spots and a HLS is popular now. I know a lot of people who lost their figures, and it was a sad sight. It is out of fashion to be overweight nowadays, but some girls don’t feel borderlines and their fight with excess weight become results in anorexia. Girls, please, be careful. It is awesome to be well-built and slim, but not as thin as a Slenderman. (matchstick man)
My appearance is ordinary. I am a medium height girl with round face, I have a shoulder length hair, but they are not so thick as I want(would like). I don’t like pigtails or ponytails, I like loose hair, unfortunately they are it's so unruly, so I have to find a master who can help me to never have a hair out of place. I have a beauty spot on my right cheek and two dimples when I smile. Can’t say that I always look glamorous but at least I try to be well turned up out. Also, I am not scared of going grey, because I already have three or four grey hairs on my head. All what I want wish is to grow old gracefully. I wish everybody beautiful oldness! Thank you.


I'm guessing that "HLS" = Healthy Life Style.

Does 'spots' mean something different now? It used to refer to marks that often appear on teenagers faces.

Has it ever been 'in fashion' to be overweight?

There are several ways to write:

"All what I want is to grow old gracefully." ; "All What I want is to grow old gracefully." ; "All what I want is to grow old gracefully."

Often it is better to use 'wish'/'desire'/'hope for' instead of 'want'. I was told that "I want" doesn't get, I should say "I would like..."

I hope this is helpful Diane.

Den

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Physical Appearance

Hello there. I would like to talk about physical appearance; it is a quite a serious, wide broad and interesting theme. Our appearance if always depends from changes according to our choice of fashion. A lot of young people do with their body whatever they want (".. do whatever they want with their body" is better)– strange make up, unordinary unusual haircut, “hipster” clothes. I don’t mean it is bad, no. I like to look at people who are not afraid to experiment with their style. But, As for me, I like to be natural, to see a pristine beauty without tattoos or fake hair/lips/nails and etc..
I like my mother’s appearance. She is a middle-aged woman.(or "She is middle-aged.") She has cropped fair hair. She is also a fair skinned woman and has freckles.(or "She has fair skin and freckles") In her 40th she looks good and young for her age.(better to say "She looks good and younger than her age" I doubt that any woman would want her real age to be told, unless it was essential!) She never dresses to the nines, but she is never scruffily-dressed. I like her free, comfortable and calm style. She bares a striking resemblance with Lois from “Griffins” cartoon. She also wears glasses. So, I like her complexion and would like to have the same youthful appearance as hers. (I would expect that sentence to end: "..when I am 40")
I can accept everything in people’s style, it is nice to look around and see beautiful faces and clothes, but I never accept untidiness. Disheveled hair, dirty clothes and shoes, that is awful. You don’t need to get always done up, but be clear and tidy. It would be hard of to hearing if someone would say “Omg, iron up your trousers, you look like a bum!”

I've had to split your text Diane, my changes made it longer than the 5000 character limit.

I'll put the other half in another 'correction'.

Den


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