Friday, My first day in italky.
Well, I'm going to tell you about my everyday activities.
First of all , I get up at 7:30 am then I have breakfast and I brush my teeth. I get ready to go to the school. When I arrive to the college, my first subject is math, by the way, it's my favorite subject, then my second subject is science , my third subject is English and finally chemistry. In my break that is around 11:30am, I eat an Apple and I buy an orange juice. When it is 12:00 pm I get out from my college, I take a taxi to my house and when I arrive at my house, my mother has done the food. After that, I do my homework and then I watch tv. Sometimes I sleep in the afternoon because the college is stressful. Around 7:40 pm I am ready to go out with some friends to play volleyball. I stop playing around 10:00pm and I go home. When I arrive at home, I have dinner with my parents and we talk a little about our day. Finally I take a shower and I go to bed.
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Well, I'm going to tell you about my everyday activities.First of all , I got up at 7:30 am then I had breakfast and I brushed my teeth. I got ready to go to the school. When I arrived to the college, my first subject was math, by the way, it's my favorite subject, then my second subject was science , my third subject was English and finally chemistry. In my break that is around 11:30am, I ate an Apple and I bought a orange juice. When it was 12:00 pm I got out from my college, I took a taxi that it which took me to my house and when I arrived to at my house, my mother had cooked rice with chicken. It was delicious. After that, I did my homework and then I watched tv. Sometimes I sleep in the afternoons because of I get stress stressful by in the college. Around 7:40 pm I am ready to go out with some friends for playing to play volleyball. I stop to play playing around 10:00pm and I go home to my house. When I arrive home to my house, I have dinner with my partners and we talk a little about our day. Finally I take a shower and I go to bed.
your expression is quite clear but i suggest you use present tense instead of past tense in this text, since you are talking about your EVERYDAY activities.
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Friday, My first day in italky.
Well, I'm going to tell you about my everyday activities.First of all , I get up at 7:30 am then I have breakfast and I brush my teeth. I get ready to go to the school. When I arrive to the college, my first subject is math, by the way, it's my favorite subject, then my second subject is science , my third subject is English and finally chemistry. In my break that is around 11:30am, I eat an Apple and I buy an orange juice. When it is 12:00 pm I get out from my college, I take a taxi which take me to my house and when I arrive at my house, my mother has done the food. After that, I do my homework and then I watch tv. Sometimes I sleep in the afternoons because college is stressful. Around 7:40 pm I am ready to go out with some friends to play volleyball. I stop playing around 10:00pm and I go home. When I arrive at home, I have dinner with my partners (you mean parents?) and we talk a little about our day. Finally I take a shower and I go to bed.
Your meaning is pretty clear, but the writing feels more like a list than a story (even a simple, every-day routine story). Try to vary your sentences a bit. For example: "I get out of class at 12:00pm and take a taxi to my house. When I arrive..."
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