A strange drem
The story takes place in the house of a young woman named Lisa. Ir was a dark stormy night, it is cold and windy. She is having an unusual dream at midnight. Gradually the dream turns in a nightmak and she becomes hight-strung and anxious about the uncertaintly of a possible attack.
In the nightmak she see a sinister shadow wich enter to her room by the window, is and Spiderman. By the time the Spiderman approaches to her bed, he becomes in a colossal animal. Suddenly Lisa notices that she is inside a plate, ¡is the Spiderman's dinner!.
The girl looks tiny. Afterwards, the Spiderman aims to eat her meanwhile she tries to scape. After five minutes the monster caught her and she felt down into the monster. The momento that the Spiderman eat her, she enters in a loop of gloomy holes.
Finally she wakes up the next day in her bed as though nothing had happened. Now every time she eats on a plate, she remember her terrifying dream.
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A strange drem
This story takes place in the house of a young woman named Lisa. It was a dark stormy night, it was cold and windy. She wais having an unusual dream at midnight. Gradually the dream turneds into a nightmarek and she becaomes highlyt-strung and anxious about the uncertaintly of a possible attack. You mixed tenses in this paragraph - it was it is - you should be consistent in the tense that you use. I would prefer to see the story told in the past tense, but there is an increasing trend to recount stories in the present for dramatic effect. Try to rewrite the remaining paragraphs in the past.In the nightmak she see a sinister shadow which enter to her room by the window, it is and Spiderman. By the time the Spiderman approaches to her bed, he becomes in a colossal animal. Suddenly Lisa notices that she is insideon a plate,. She ¡is the Spiderman's dinner!.
The girl looks tiny. Afterwards, the Spiderman aims to eat her meanwhile she tries to escape. After five minutes the monster caught her and she fellt down into the monster. The momento that the Spiderman eat swallowed (eat is OK, but he swallowed her whole without chewing) her, she enters in a loop of gloomy holes.
Finally she wakes up the next day in her bed as though nothing had happened. Now every time she eats on a plate, she remember her terrifying dream.
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The title is: a strange dream. Sorry :)
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