My first trip. Paris Since I was a child, I've dreamt with the idea to travelling around Europe. Many years ago, when I was 16, I had the chance to visit Paris. It was my first time in other country a

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My first trip. Paris Since I was a child, I've dreamt with the idea to travelling around Europe. Many years ago, when I was 16, I had the chance to visit Paris. It was my first time in other country and It was very excited. I went with my school's colleges. Like you can imagine, we enjoyed a lot in this trip. I still remember all about it. We travelled by train from Madrid. We arrived in Paris at midday. The trip was some days after a terrorist attack in Madrid, so there were a lot of security. It was a wind mild there. We felt confortables and safe there. The first monument that we visited was The Eifield Tower. I remember that I felt in a fairy tale. It was magic. But, in this moment we didn't climb the tower. I felt in love with this city. Although we visited the city y a few days, it was worth. I would like to be rich to travelling more around the world. XXX

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My first trip. Paris

Since I was a child, I've dreamt with the idea to of one day travelling around Europe. Many years ago, when I was 16, I had the chance to visit Paris. It was my first time in another country and I was very excited. I went with my colleagues. school's colleges As you can imagine, we enjoyed a lot in this trip a lot.

I still remember all about it. We travelled by train from Madrid and arrived in Paris at midday. The trip was some days after a terrorist attack in Madrid, so there was a lot of security. There was a mild wind there, so we felt comfortable and safe. The first monument that we visited was the Eiffel Tower. I remember that I felt as if I was in a fairy tale. It was a magical experience, but in this moment we didn't climb the tower. I fell in love with this city.

Although we only visited the city for a few days, it was well worth it.

I would like to be rich to travelling so that I could travel around the world more.

XXX

"Some" = In this situation, the way you used "some" is actually grammatically correct, though you can use a similar word/phrase such as 'a few', or 'several' to attain the same feeling. They all imply the fact that you cannot specify the exact number of days.

Most of my corrections are similar to Daniel's, but I changed around some phrases without affecting the meaning of the passage in order to give an idea of how to say the same thing in perhaps more fanciful and fluid ways.

My first trip. Paris

Since I was a child, I've dreamt with had the idea to travelling around Europe. Many years ago, when I was 16, I had the chance to visit Paris. It was my first time in another country and it was very exciting. I went with my school's colleges It was a school trip. Like As you can imagine, we all enjoyed a lot in this trip a lot.

I still remember all about it. We travelled by train from Madrid We and arrived in Paris at midday. The trip was some a few days after a terrorist attack in Madrid so there was a lot of security. It There was a wind mild wind there. We felt confortables and safe there. The first monument that we visited was the Eiffel Tower. I remember that I felt as if I was in a fairy tale It and as if it was magical. But, in this moment we didn't climb the tower. I fell in love with this city.

Although we only visited the city for a few days, it was worth .

I would like to be rich to travelling so I could travel more around the world.

XXX

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