Could you help me, please, with this sentences?
I've read that present continious and present simple could be used in a story, if I want to emphasize that something happened suddenly. So, did I make it right?
And then happens something worthy of comedic mute films with Charlie Chaplin in a leading role. Waiter with a tray was carefully gliding between gipsy tables, collecting dirty cups; and nearby banana peel were hiding, thrown on the ground by one of the visitors – either the result of poor manners or insidiousness; at the last moment the young man noticed it and escaped falling, squatted on his heels to lift the trash, but this is where the story begins: a plastic chair behind his back is starting to move by the wind and strongly pushes him, and because of that the waiter jerks, falls anyway and drops the tray with cups and unfinished coffee right on the lady’s knees.
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Could you help me, please, with this sentences?
I've read that present continious and present simple could be used in a story, if I want to emphasize that something happened suddenly. So, did I make it right?And then happens something Something happens worthy of comedic mute silent films with Charlie Chaplin in a leading role. A Waiter with a tray was carefully gliding between gipsy tables, collecting dirty cups; and (Begin a new sentence here). Nearby a banana peel were hiding is hiding (You'll want to use present tense here) , thrown on the ground by one of the visitors – either the result of poor manners or insidiousness. (Very good! This is another good place to start a new sentence) At the last moment, the young man noticed it and escaped falling. (Begin new sentence) He squatted on his heels to lift the trash, but this is where the story begins: a plastic chair behind his back is starting to move being moved by the wind and strongly pushes him (end the sentence here.) and because of that the waiter jerks, The waiter jerks, falls anyway, and drops the tray with cups and unfinished coffee right on the lady’s knees.
Overall a very good job with the progressive and simple present tense. Grammar notes: please review "run-on sentences," direct and indirect articles, and possibly the hardest thing to master in English, preposional phrases.
Not bad!
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Awww, thank you a lot!
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You distinguished between the continuous and simple present perfectly. There were some other issues, though, mostly with word order. I will post a correction later. Good job!
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