How important is it for people to have hobbies?
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According with a study of humans behaviour is a fact that one of the things which has a lot of importance in free-time is have a hobby.
But, why hobbies are important for us? Along the time is well known which this activities help to relieve stress. Some people like playing videogames, read magazines or books, others prefer do creative activities for example, take a ride by car to anywhere or visit strange places, but all hobbies have in common that make us happier.
On the other hand you have to physicians recommend doing exercise or some sport in free-time to be healthier, nevertheless, people do not want or prefer carry out other activity.
Overall, I agree with hobbies are really important along the life because perform one part of our day and they help to stay in focus when you are doing other activity, with regard to physicians I coincide that excercise is necesary to be healthier but I discard this kind of activity like hobby for some people, I think (can i discard "that"?) exercise needs to be obligatory and be taken like hobby for the people who do( could be "does"?) not like.
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How important is it for people to have hobbies?
I would like you all to review this essay and tell me if it has any mistakes. Thanks!According to a study of humans behaviour, it is a fact that one of the things which has a lot of importance in free-time (1) is having a hobby.
But, why are hobbies so important for us? It has been well known for a long time which this activities help to relieve stress. Some people like playing video games or reading magazines or books, while others prefer doing creative activities. For example, driving somewhere in a car, or visiting strange places, but something that all hobbies have in common is that they make us happier.
On the other hand, you have to physicians who recommend exercising or playing some sport in your free-time to be healthier. Nevertheless, people who do not want or prefer not to do one of these activities can do other activities.
Overall, I agree that hobbies are really important throughout life because perform one part of our day and they help to stay in focus when you are doing other activity. With regard to physicians, I agree that exercise is necessary to be healthy, but I discard this kind of activity as a hobby for some people. I think exercise needs to be obligatory and be treated as a hobby for the people who do not like it.
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That's an interesting topic Alfonso. I think people have hobby because they are need a place, where they will fell himself good, and where they fell be yourself. Also they are need a freedom, and hobby gives them this opportunity.
(I hope that I did not make many mistakes))
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