Name a place in my country you would recommend others to visit.

Name a place in my country you would recommend others to visit.

(Just a few additional corrections)

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I would recommend Nikko National Park that is located in Tochigi. There is a big shrine there which is one of Japan's world heritage sites. That big shrine is called Nikko Toshougu, that was established in 1617. Many foreigners go there because Nikko has hot springs, lakes and falls, and it is easy to access from Tokyo. That is why I would recommend it to others for a visit.

Notes:

-It is better if you make short but meaningful statements.

-If it is an essay, I have a tip. Do the tail-head process in writing.

Example:

(1) I would recommend the Nikko National Park that is located in Tochigi. (2) The Nikko National Park has a big shrine which is called as the Nikko Toshougu. (3) Nikko Toshougu is one of Japan's world heritage sites that was establised in 1617. (4) This beautiful heritage site is popular to different foreigners because it is accessible from Tokyo.

Try to analyze:

-Sentence 1 almost ended with Nikko National Park

-Sentence 2 started with Nikko National Park then ended with Nikko Toshougu

-Sentence 3 started with Nikko Toshougu then almost ended with world heritage sites

-Sentence 4 started with world heritage sites

This is the tail-head technique in writing. The tail becomes the head, or the last part becomes the heading of your following sentences. I advise it to my students who are beginning to learn writing in English. This could be a good start. You can just add some styles when you have mastered the technique already. This will overflow your ideas.

That's all

Cheers! :)