Extravagant spending on college campus
Recently, the issue of extravagant spending on college campus has been brought into focus. Nowadays, many students' expense is even much more than their parents', which makes us keep wondering how could this thing happen.
The causes for this issue are varied, of which the main cause is comparing phenomenon. In college, we live with our roommates and it's human nature to maintain our image in front of those whom we are not familiar with, which makes us buy more beautiful clothes, shoes to make up ourselves, as a result, spending increased unconsciously.
Certainly, what we talked above is not the sole reason. Falling in love is also responsible for this problem. As students, most of us are not economically independent, so, if we want to buy something for girlfriends or boyfriends, we have to spend more.
Furthermore, unreasonable way of managing money could be one reason.
As the saying goes that thrift is a good virtue. In my opinion, we shouldn't feel ashamed to be thrifty. In contrast, we should feel ashamed to live a luxurious life using our parents' money.
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Extravagant spending on college campus
Recently, the issue of extravagant spending on college campus has been brought into focus. Nowadays, many students' expenses are is even much more than their parents', which makes us keep wondering how (this could of happened) this thing happen.The causes for this issue are varied, of which the main cause is a phenomenon of maintaining our image. In college, we live with our roommates and it's human nature to maintain our image in front of those whom we are not familiar with, which makes us buy more beautiful clothes and shoes to make up our image ourselves, as a result, spending increased unconsciously.
Certainly, what we talked about above is not the sole reason. Falling in love is also responsible for this problem. As students, most of us are not economically independent, so, if we want to buy something for our girlfriends or boyfriends, we have to spend more.
Furthermore, the unreasonable way of managing money could be one reason.
As the saying goes that thrift is a good virtue. In my opinion, we shouldn't feel ashamed to be thrifty. In contrast, we should feel ashamed to live a luxurious life using our parents' money.
Comments:
Yellow = Corrections, Blue = my opinion
(1) This could happen = I think is more natural, but '...this thing happen' makes sense as well
(2) the main cause is comparing phenomenon = this makes sense, but in English it would be more natural to talk about our 'image' or 'maintaining our image', which leads us to spend money.
(3) to make up ourselves = is once again understandable, but it might be more natural to say "...to make up our image" OR "...To make up our image of ourselves"
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