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One dream Once he told her of his sympathy for her and said his dream. It was the warm summer rain. From far away was hearing the tender music of duduk. He was alone at the street of a big foreign city. He was feeling despair because he was alone. He was cring, because the despair was such strong. He was there without her...It was unclear what happened... Only that they were together on the sea beach. The same warm summer rain fell from the sky, covering the wall from pring eyes. His head lay on your thighs...he was looking at your cute face...she was smiling and the rain was dropping from her face on his...they were kissing... he was feeling her wet gentle lips... So much happiness was in his heat. But suddenly it disappeared. And only despair left, but nothing instead...

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One dream

Once he told her of his sympathy for her and said told her about his dream.
It was the warm summer rain. From far away he was hearing the tender music of duduk - (I'm not sure what you mean here?). He was alone at in the street of a big foreign city. He was feeling despair because he was alone. He was crying, because the despair was such so strong. He was there without her...It was unclear what happened...
Only that they were together on the sea beach (You only need to say beach as 'sea beach' doesn't sound right). The same warm summer rain fell from the sky, covering the wall from pring  (I'm not sure what you mean here?) eyes. His head lay on your her thighs...he was looking at your  her cute face...she was smiling and the rain was dropping from her face on his...they were kissing... he was feeling her wet gentle lips... So much happiness was in his heart, but suddenly it disappeared, and only despair left, but nothing instead...

We never start a sentence with 'but' or 'and' . Overall a good effort, keep up the good work! 

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