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Anyone can help me to correct the following English article? Thank you so much!! Undergraduates' graduation thesis management in colleges and universities is a hard work with long time duration , involving large numbers of staff and students and forming a great deal of data and document . The traditional mode of thesis management brings about a series of problems such as causing "bottleneck" for administrative personnel ,communicating barriers among students , teachers and administrative personnel .And paper thesis being inconvenient for search ; lack of effective supervision . Thus ,designing and developing a management system of undergraduates' thesis on net , which is beneficial for tracking the whole process ,realizing electronic management of graduation thesis , and building a platform for managers , teachers and students , and also changing the role of administrative personnel as medium between teachers and students.In a word, it is necessary for improving working efficiency for administrative personnel and relieving their heavy workload , as well as for later thesis evaluation and teaching researches.The system uses ASP.NET technology and three-tier technology to design and develop, and by using SQL Server 2008 database for data management. The system is mainly to meet the students and teachers’demands to submit, audit and manage documents. Besides teachers also can assess the student's paper (design) and the oral defense through the internet, therefore, they are able to research the performance of their students to reply, and teachers can check their students' format of paper and research the score of their students’ reply their paper and manage their students’ documents. Similarly, Administrators can view the student's related information in the whole process and manage the other basic information such as users and class.

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Anyone can help me to correct the following English article? Thank you so much!!

The management of Undergraduates' graduation theses in colleges and universities is hard work and takes a long time. It involves a lot of staff and students and creates a lot of data and documents. Traditionally it creates a series of problems such bottlenecks for administrators, communication problems with students, teachers and administrators. And a paper thesis is inconvenient to query, lacking effective supervision. Thus to design and develop a computer system of undergraduates' theses on the net which helps track the whole process and to build a platform for managers, teachers and students, and for administrators to become a bridge between teachers and students, is a good thing*. In short this is needed to improve efficiency for administrators to relieve their heavy workload , as well as for later thesis evaluation and educational research. The system uses ASP.NET technology and three-tier technology to design and develop. It also uses SQL Server 2008 database for data management. The system is mainly to meet the student and teacher submissions, audits and to manage documents. Also teachers can assess the student's paper (design?) and their oral defense through the internet so they can research the performance of their students to reply?, and teachers can check their students' format of paper? and research the score of their students’ reply their paper and manage their students’ documents. Similarly, administrators can view the student's related information in the whole process and manage the other basic information such as users and class.

*you might try shorter sentences. Many people will stop reading after 200 words.

Generally well written, but perhaps overlong and cumbrous. Some sentences were too long to understand, I found.

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