I have to write a description of someone whi I admire, could you please check this for me? If there is someone who I really admire is certainly my father. He was born in Calabria in 1949 and he still

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I have to write a description of someone whi I admire, could you please check this for me? If there is someone who I really admire is certainly my father. He was born in Calabria in 1949 and he still has the force of a young man! He is my guide and even if I do not speak a lot with him I am sure that he knows how much he is important to me. About his physical appearence there is not a lot to say, he is not a tall man, when he was younger he was thinner than now, he wears glasses and he has beutiful blue eyes which always seem smiling. I am proud of him because he has always been a fair and simple person, who is always ready to help even if he has not time or if is tired. He does not care about your physical appearence and he always tries to be gentle with you. My father did not have an excellent school education because my grandparents were not rich and my father has two brothers younger than him. He has always known that if you want something you have to make efforts to get it. That is what he did: he has always made efforts and when he was 27 he became a selfemployement. He has also a lot of flaws, and I have herited most of them! He is a very distracted man and often loses something like his mobilephone or his keys. He loves solving problems by himself and he does not want to ask, neither to find a street! I love his sunny personality,despite all his problems he manages to make people able to feel safe and to make them laugh.

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I have to write a description of someone whom I admire, could you please check this for me?

If there is someone who I really admire it is certainly my father.
He was born in Calabria in 1949 and he still has the force of a young man! He is my guide and even if I do not speak a lot with him I am sure that he knows how important he is to me.
About his physical appearance there is not a lot to say. He is not a tall man, when he was younger he was thinner than now. He wears glasses and he has beautiful blue eyes which always seem to be smiling.
I am proud of him because he has always been a fair and simple person, who is always ready to help even if he has no time or if he is tired. He does not care about your physical appearance and he always tries to be gentle with you.
My father did not have an excellent school education because my grandparents were not rich and my father has two brothers younger than him. He has always known that if you want something you have to make efforts to get it. That is what he did: he has always made efforts and when he was 27 he became self-employed.
He has also a lot of flaws, and I have inherited most of them! He is a very distracted man and often loses something like his mobile phone or his keys. He loves solving problems by himself and he does not want to ask, neither for directions to a street!
I love his sunny personality. Despite all his problems he manages to make people able to feel safe and to make them laugh.

Very well written!

I have to write a description of someone whom [or who] I admire; could you please check this for me?

If there is one person who I really admire, it is certainly my father.
He was born in Calabria in 1949 and he still has the force [spirit, energy, vitality, presence, strength] of a young man! He is my guide and even if I do not speak a lot with him I am sure that he knows how important he is to me.
About his physical appearence, there is not a lot to say. He is not a tall man. When he was younger he was thinner than he is now. He wears glasses and he has beautiful blue eyes which always seem to be smiling.
I am proud of him because he has always been a fair and simple person, who is always ready to help even if he doesn't have much time or if is tired. He does not care about your physical appearence and he always tries to be gentle with you.
My father did not have an excellent school education because my grandparents were not rich. My father has two brothers younger than him. He has always known that if you want something you have to make efforts to get it. That is what he did: he has always made efforts and when he was 27 he became self-employed.
He also has a lot of flaws, and I have inherited most of them! He is a very easily distracted man and often loses things like his mobile phone or his keys. He loves solving problems by himself and he does not want to ask for help, not even to ask directions!
I love his sunny personality. Despite all his problems he manages to make people able to feel safe and to make them laugh.

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Hi Valentina. Your father certainly sounds like a humble, kind, hard-working man.

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Employment is the condition of being employed - an abstraction. A person cannot be "employment" or "self-employment". A person can be an "employee" or "self-employed".

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