The homemade sandwich
Yesterdey ,i was watching TV on the sofa,and i saw the sandwich that had made by the herione,and then it hit me ,there was a idea in my mind : I also come to make homemade sandwich,so i changed my clothes and hold my wallet and can’t wait to go to the supermaket.
In the supermaket ,i was thingking what i need to buy ,then i had a list in the phone,such as bread,ramaine lecttuce,ham sausage,tomatos and cucumbers,which is my favorite.Check it,after buying,I went home and prepared the material of food.At first, to wash ramaine lecttuce,tomatos and cucumbers.The second ,to cut cucumber, tomato and ham sausage into pieces.Then to take two piece of breads,putting ramaine lecttuce, cucumber, tomato and ham sausage in turn on the piece of bread,and aother piece of bread on top ,the sandwich is finished and i enjoy it! Although this is easy to do,I still very satisfited.
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The homemade sandwich
In the supermarket, I was thinking about what i needed to buy. I had a list on my phone with items such as bread, romaine lettuce, ham sausage, tomatoes, and cucumbers. Cucumbers are my favorite. After buying, I went home and prepared the food.
First, I washed the romaine lettuce, tomatoes, and cucumbers. Second, I cut the cucumber, tomato and ham sausage into pieces. Finally, I took two pieces of bread, putting romaine lettuce, cucumber, tomato, and ham sausage in turn on one piece of bread. I placed the other on top and the sandwich is finished. I enjoyed it! Although this is easy to do, I was still very satisfied.
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Good start. Remember to capitalize "I" when by itself. There were a few spelling errors that I forgot to point out with the mark-up. Also, consider using shorter sentences. Most times it is much clearer to keep a single thought per sentence.
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