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Hi guys ~! Hello ~ This is my first note ! so I'm nervous just little bit. because I can't write well anyway l will update my stories. I believe that you guys reads and modifies the note . thanks :) Firstly, l come from South Korea, my name is Dongkeun Choi call me Don, please I think you can't tell my name's pronounce It so hard to you anyway I have big families,a daddy, a mom, a sister, 2 brothers and me Actually, when I was young I have had a another sister but she went to the kingdom of heaven. so I don't have memories about her ... but my parent remember I think they can't forgot they's lovely daughter since she were born. she still living my families' heart . the second story is when I was high school I have had lost my eye sight. because I have skin trouble that name is atopy you know this disease ? anyway I was apply ointment to wounds for almost 10 years ? the salve's ingredient is steroid . so caused side effects to me such as cataract, glaucoma and detachment of the retina at a winter vacation . :( so I couldn't see the world.for 2 years It was really sad happened After 8 operations, I could see a litter bit, accelerando I regained, now is fine ! as a result I was exempted from military service. OK, that's it for today thanks !! see you tomorrow ! I’ll really be looking forward to hearing from you. have a good day my friends !

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Hi guys ~!

Hello ~
This is my first note ! so I'm just a little bit  nervous.
Because I can't write well, anyway l will update my stories regularly.
I believe that you guys will read and modify my notes.
thanks :)

Firstly, my name is Dongkeun Choi, l come from South Korea,  
Please call me Don, I think you won't be able to pronounce my name.
I have big family, my dad, mom, a sister and 2 brothers. 
Actually, when I was young I have had a another sister but she's no longer with us.
I don't have any memories of her ... but my parent remember, I think they can't forgot their lovely daughter. She still lives my families' heart.

The second story is when I was in high school I lost my eye sight.
Because I have a skin condition named atopy, do you know this disease ? Anyway I was applied ointment to the wounds for almost 10 years. One of the salve's ingredients is steroids. This caused side effects such as cataract, glaucoma and detachment of the retinas during the winter vacation . :( So I lost the ability to see the world, for 2 years. It was really sad.

 
After 8 operations, I could see a litter bit, and now my sight is fine! as a result I was exempt from military service.
OK, that's it for today.
Thanks! See you tomorrow!
I’ll really be looking forward to hearing from you.
have a good day my friends!



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Hi guys!

Hello.
This is my first note so I'm just little bit nervous.
Even though I can't write well l will tell you my story.
I hope that you guys read it and correct this Notebook entry.
Thanks :)

Firstly, l come from South Korea. My name is Dongkeun Choi.
Call me Don, please. I'm guessing you don't know how to pronounce my name. 
Anyway I have a big family - my father, my mother, a sister and two brothers, in addition to me. 
Actually, I had another sister but she went to the Kingdom of Heaven when I was young, so I don't have any memories of her, but my parents remember her. I don't think they can ever forget their lovely daughter. She is still living in my family's heart .
The second thing I want to write about is the time I lost my eyesight when I was high school.
I have a skin problem called atopy. Do you know this disease? Anyway, I used to apply ointment to my skin rashes for almost 10 years. The ointment contains a steroid, which caused side effects in me, such as cataracts, glaucoma and detachment of the retina. The detachment of the retina happened during one winter vacation. As a result, I couldn't see anything for 2 years   :(  It was really sad when that happened. 

After 8 operations, I could see a little bit better, and gradually I regained my sight, which is fine now. As a result of this eye problem, I was exempted from military service. 

OK, that's it for today.
Thanks for reading! See you tomorrow!
I’m really looking forward to hearing from you.
Have a good day, my friends!

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