my research paper (1) can someone help to correct my paper, the professor said I wrote a lot of fragment and I must repair my sentences Donating Organs for Brain Dead Patients In 2013, the mother of

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my research paper (1) can someone help to correct my paper, the professor said I wrote a lot of fragment and I must repair my sentences Donating Organs for Brain Dead Patients In 2013, the mother of seven months old baby, Lukas Clark, decided to donate her baby’s organs. After he had been beaten and abused by a babysitter that ended up with him getting a brain dead. Lukas had saved many lives for many patients who have been waiting in the hospital beds, because of his mom’s decision. The U.S. Government Information on Organ and Tissue Donation and Transplantation, results demonstrate that every ten minutes a patient is added to the transplant list. Which is contains the names of the patients who needs one organ or more to survive and get better. The organs are usually taken from donors who were brain injured and living on machines. For example, if someone has a kidney failure and needs a kidney transplant, his name will be added to the transplant list according to his condition. On the other hand, if someone who signed for organ donation had an accident and become a brain dead, if these two patients were a match then the kidney patient will get a kidney. Going back to the history of organ donation, it started in 1954 by Dr. Joseph Murray and Dr. David Hume at Brigham Hospital in Boston. A successful kidney transplant in the history was between identical twins according to LiveOnnY. With no alternative for organs, donation could be the best solution for those who are lying in a hospital bed waiting for a small chance of hope. Some people might be against and some people might be in favour of it. Both sides have their own reasons, experience to the donation process The best candidates for donating organs are those who suffered a brain injury that led them to brain death. If someone is brain dead condition, it means that their brain and stem did lost it function due to an injury or a lack of oxygen and nutrients. And because brain dead patients have no functions in their brain, and have no chance of recovery. They consider as dead people. For the patient’s organs, getting the oxygen without being used is what make them the perfect donors, because the organs are still a live with the machines help and the patient don’t use them any more as a result of their head injury. Many people who have been waiting in the transplant list can get an organ, heart, kidney, liver, Intestines, cornea, and even a skin for burned people.

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can someone help to correct my paper, the professor said I wrote a lot of fragment and I must repair my sentences

Donating Organs for Brain Dead Patients

In 2013 the mother of Lukas Clark, a seven month old baby, decided to donate her baby’s organs. Her baby was brain dead after he had been beaten and abused by his babysitter. Many patients that had been waiting in the hospital for an organ donor were saved by Lukas, as a result of his mom's decision. According to the U.S. Government information on organ and tissue donation and transplantation, every ten minutes a patient is added to the transplant list. The extensive list contains the names of every patient that needs one or more organs to survive. The organs are usually taken from donors who were brain dead and living on life support machines.

If someone has kidney failure and needs a Kidney transplant, their name will be added to the transplant list according to their condition. Then when someone that was a registered organ donor dies in an accident or becomes brain dead, their kidney can be donated to the waiting patient if they were a match.

Looking back at the history of organ donation, it was started in 1954 by Dr. Joseph Murray and Dr. David Hume at Brigham Hospital in Boston, MA. The first successful kidney transplant was between identical twins,according to (LiveonnY - not sure what this is). With no alternative for organs, an organ donation is the only solution for those who are sick in a hospital waiting for a small chance of hope. There are those against organ donation and those in favor. Both sides have their own reasons why they may agree or disagree.

The best candidates for donating organs are those who suffered a brain injury that caused them to become brain dead. If someone is becomes brain dead, it means that their brain and stem have lost all function due to an injury or a lack of oxygen. Brain dead patients have no chance of recovery because their brain no longer functions. They can be considered dead as only a machine keeps them alive.Brain dead patients make perfect donors because they organs are still kept alive and receive oxygen by life support. Many people who have been waiting on the organ donor transplant list can get an organs such as, a heart, a kidney, a liver, intestines, a cornea, and even a skin transplant for burned people.

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