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Music In our daily lives today, music is an important part for one's personality. It is one of popular entertainment to be loved by teenagers now. Music is essential in parties, it brings us happy, comfortable and relaxed when we feel tired, stressed or under pressure by work and study. We can find music in everywhere such as restaurants , bars, supermarkets and so on. It has a lot of benefits not only for spirit but also for our health. In the morning, everyone usually starts a day by a exercise rhythm with music, which helps us in good mood health and spirit to prepare for the activities of new day. To sum up, music leads us to a better life.( my paragraph ) This is a paragraph written by my English teacher: There is no doubt at all that music is the great creation of man, which touches man's soul and makes man sympathically manifest unspoken desire and humanity in him. The effect of music, therefore, can break boundaries to unit people despite religions, cultures or races. Music does bring people together. It allows us to experience the same emotions. People everywhere are the same in the heart and spirit. Indeed, music seems to be a wonderful force that heals the world. Besides, according to scientists, listening to music by Mozart for 10 minutes can have a direct effect on people's ability to work out problems. Music is also the therapy that helps feel more optimistic change the mood of spirit. A large number of patients can be cured by the effect of music. Music can stimulate particular activity in the brain and helps us to lead a better life. Music is of great importance.

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   In our daily lives today, music is an important part for of one's personality. It is a one of popular form of entertainment to be loved by teenagers now. Music is essential in for parties, it brings makes us happy, comfortable and relaxed when we feel tired, stressed or under pressure by work and study. We can find music in everywhere such as restaurants, bars, supermarkets and so on. It has a lot of benefits not only for spirit but also for our health. In the morning, everyone usually starts a day by with a exercise rhythm with music, which helps to put us in good mood health and spirit to prepare for the activities of new day.

   To sum up, music leads us to a better life.( my paragraph ) This is a paragraph written by my English teacher: There is no doubt at all that music is the great creation of man, which touches man's soul and makes man sympathetically manifest unspoken desire and humanity in him. The effect of music, therefore, can break boundaries to unite people despite religions, cultures or races. Music does bring people together. It allows us to experience the same emotions. People everywhere are the same in the heart and spirit. Indeed, music seems to be a wonderful force that heals the world. Besides, Moreover, according to scientists, listening to music by Mozart for 10 minutes can have a direct effect on people's ability to work out problems. Music is also the therapy therapeutic in that it helps people feel more optimistic and can change a person's mood of spirit . A large number of patients can be cured by the effect of music. Music can stimulate particular activity in the brain and helps us to lead a better life. Music is of great importance.


If you have any questions you can ask here or in a private message. For your information, there was a scientific inaccuracy in the last paragraph. Music can have positive affects on patients, but does not "cure" sick people.

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