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My first day on Carnival of "Santa Cruz de Tenerife" (Islas Canarias) Hi everybody! How are you? Well.. I'm going to tell to you about my first tragic day on Carnival of Tenerife. I have family on Tenerife, my uncle and my cousin, and after of 8 years, I decided to come back to see them I wanted to live the Carnival of Tenerife, it's the second most important of the world. There, the party during 2 weeks aproximately, every day, night and day. It's a madness. It was Saturday and there wasn't party on the night, in the street, hundred of bars playing music in each corner, in addition to the concerts. Million people were dancing in the streets until 6 a.m. It was to be one of my best partys and nights. I was really enjoying it, but everything couldn't be perfect. When we came back to house with bus, I sat on the floor with my cousin because all seats were occupied. Suddenly, my phone fall, and when I was going to take it, it wasn't there anymore. I think some boys that weren't opposite me toke it, I ask them but obviusly they said me no. I asked to everyone of the persons of the bus, but anybody wasn't matter what happened to me. My last option was to go to the chofer of bus, but he dind't want to know nothing neither. He was an irresponsible, the phone was there on the bus. I went to house without my mobile phone, and it was my first day on Carnivals. I was bought mobile phone 6 months ago, it was a LG G4.... I lost all my photos, videos and so on... :( Please, correct my mistakes... thanks so much!

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My first day on at Carnival of "Santa Cruz de Tenerife" (Islas Canarias)

Hi everybody!
How are you?
Well.. I'm going to tell to you about my first tragic day on Carnival of Tenerife.
I have family on Tenerife, my uncle and my cousin, and after of 8 years, I decided to come back to see them.
I wanted to live see the Carnival of Tenerife, because it's the second most important of in the world.
There, they party during for approximately 2 weeks approximately, every day, night and day. It's a madness.
It was Saturday and there wasn't a party on the that night, in the street, hundred of bars playing music in on each (better: every) corner, in addition to the concerts. Millions of people were dancing in the streets until 6 a.m. It was to be one of my best parties and nights. I was really enjoying it, but everything couldn't be perfect.
When we came back to house with bus took the bus home, I sat on the floor with my cousin because all the seats were occupied.
Suddenly, my phone fell, and when I was going went to take it, it wasn't there anymore.
I think some boys that weren't opposite me tooke it, I asked them but obviously they said me no.
I asked to everyone of the persons of on the bus, but anybody wasn't matter nobody cared what happened to me.
My last option was to go to the chauffeur of the bus (better: bus driver), but he dind't want to know do anything neither. He was an irresponsible, the phone was there on the bus.
I went to house home without my mobile phone, and it was my first day on at Carnivals.
I was had just bought mobile phone 6 months ago, it was an LG G4.... I lost all my photos, videos and so on... :(

Please, correct my mistakes... thanks so much!

 

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Good job!

- We often use the Spanish/Portuguese spelling "carnaval" because the English spelling "carnival" is also a "circus".

(You should have had your cousin call your phone while you were still on the bus!)

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