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Working is one of the most important activities for humans, since we aren’t children any more. That´s why everyone is looking for a formal job. Wether a job in a Company or entrepreneurship, everybody use to dream with an special way to earn money to meet their needs. It’s clear that this dream is conformed by two parts: (1) money and (2) the way to get it. I would like to share with you why «the way to get it (the money)» is absolutely more important for me.
Money is something really common. Every country is printing this everyday and there are a lot in the streets. This stuff is useful to meet needs such as food, a home and transportation, as well money can provide a luxury life with vacations in Dubai, a Ferrari sport car and castles. In summary: money is a stuff and is useful to get more stuffs. But… am I looking just for stuffs? I guess no. I’m sure that the most beautiful moments in my life have been really special not because of the money, but because of the people who have been with me. This fact shows me that PEOPLE is definitely more important than stuffs. Just for this, I can’t say that “money” issue is relevant for me if I have to make a decision about job.
In spite of money is not the most relevant thing, it is really relevant. I have to pay bills and I want to share my incomes with my family. That’s why I couldn’t say that I would be able to choose a job just because it is interesting. I think that we must to make a razonable decision about our job. Of course, if the payment for an interesting job is enough to pay my bills and allows me to reach my goals (even though in a long term) I will always prefer this, even if the payment for the boring job is higher.
Finally, I would like to say that we have to work FOR US; not for bills or for our professional titles. Professional titles and bills are made for us and we have to enjoy them. That’s why choosing a job JUST because of the money won’t be never a good idea.
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Please, I really need your help to improve my writing :) Thank you for your help
Working is one of the most important activities for humans (better: adults), since we aren’t children any more. That´s why everyone is looking for a formal job. Whether a job in a company or entrepreneurship, everybody used to dream of awith an special way to earn money to meet their needs. It’s clear that this dream is conformed by two parts: (1) money and (2) the way to get it. I would like to share with you why «the way to get it (the money)» is the most absolutely more important to for me.Money is something really common. Every country is printing this everyday and there is are a lot on in the streets. This stuff is useful to meet needs such as food, a home and transportation, as well money which can provide a luxury life with vacations in Dubai, a Ferrari sport car and castles. In summary: money is a thing stuff and is useful to get more stuffs (better: things). But… am I just looking just for stuffs? I guess not. I’m sure that the most beautiful moments in my life have been really special not because of the money, but because of the people who have been with me. This fact shows me that PEOPLE areis definitely more important than stuffs. Because ofJust for this, I can’t say that the “money” issue is relevant tofor me if I have to make a decision about a job.
In spite of money not being is not the most relevant thing, it is really relevant. I have to pay bills and I want to share my incomes with my family. That’s why I couldn’t say that I would be able to choose a job just because it is interesting. I think that we must to make a reasonable decision about our job. Of course, if the payment (better: wage) for an interesting job is enough to pay my bills and allows me to reach my goals (even though in a long term) I will always prefer this, even if the payment for the boring job is higher.
Finally, I would like to say that we have to work FOR US; not for bills or for our professional titles. Professional titles and bills are made for us and we have to enjoy them. That’s why choosing a job JUST because of the money won’t be never be a good idea.
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