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A dark and gloomy path 【1】 It was close to the midnight, I prepared to go home in the familiar way. But I met a rare occurrence in which the road was under construction. With no many choices, I could only choose a path what looked like a short cut in which I never walked it before. In that heat wave of path, I really desired a cool drink. Spoke of the devil, there was really a vending machine not far from me. I rushed to the machine and hurried to pay the money for drinking, yet the machine was out of order. I neither had the drink, nor had the refund. When I was annoyed, abruptly, a man appeared in my side. He wore an old gown looking rather like a tramp. Then he told me something which I didn’t understand it. Then he began to manage the trouble machine. No sooner, my money returned back, even if there was not a drink as before.

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A dark and gloomy path 【1】

It was close to the midnight, I prepared to go home in the familiar way.

It was close to midnight as I went my usual way home.


But I met a rare occurrence in which the road was under construction.

It was rather unusual that the road happened to be under repair and totally blocked off.


With no many choices, I could only choose a path what looked like a short cut in which I never walked it before.

Without much of a choice, I had go through a path which looked like a short cut. I had never tried this path before.

In that heat wave of path, I really desired a cool drink.

It was hot and humid going down the path. My throat started to burn and my thoughts turned to having a cool drink.


Spoke of the devil, there was really a vending machine not far from me. I rushed to the machine and hurried to pay the money for drinking, yet the machine was out of order. I neither had the drink, nor had the refund.

Speak of the devil, I spied a vending machine not much further along. I quickly made my way over to and rushed to get the change into the machine. Unknowingly, the machine was out of order and I was neither able to get the drink nor get back the change.

When I was annoyed, abruptly, a man appeared in my side. He wore an old gown looking rather like a tramp. Then he told me something which I didn’t understand it.

As my frustration grew,  a man abruptly appeared by my side. He wore an old gown and looked rather like a tramp. 


Then he began to manage the trouble machine. No sooner, my money returned back, even if there was not a drink as before.

I do not know what he did to the machine but he managed to get my money back from it.


(Fiction is not a strong point of mine. The above are some pointers. However, every writer would have a different opinion)

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