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An important thing in my lifetime An important thing in my lifetime happened to me in 1996. I fell in love with a young girl for the first time in my life. I knew her in a shopping mall which I work in as it happens. Just then I fallen behind in work and I have been a little lonely . I fell an easy prey to her charm. Her hair fell over he shoulders in a fine of head hair, and looked very pretty. In spite of , our feeling finally fall out, but then I loved her dearly. One day she came to see me, I happened to be out. at that time, we even were ready for a journey. we used to got together early in the morning. I got up very early then ,and was ready to greeting her. In those days, I have not a lot of work to catch up on ,so we could often met. In spite of she deserted me in the long run, but I missed her very much the years that followed.

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I am not sure with my english so I ask a native speaker from USA to make correction for your entry. I hope you don't mind.

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An important thing in my life was happened to me in1996. I fell in love with a young girl for the first time.

I met her in a shopping mall where I worked at the time. Just then, I fell behind in work and have been feeling a lttle lonely. I fell to her charm like an easy prey.  Her hair fell over her shoulders, which looked very pretty.

Our feeling finally fell apart, but I kept loving her dearly.  One day she came to see me, but I happened to be out at the time.  We were ready for another journey.

We used to get together in the early morning.  I got up very early to get ready to meet her.  I wasn't very busy during those days, so I had enough time to spend with her.

She deserted me in the long run, but despite that, I still miss her in the years that follow.

你好从美国!--- correction by Zummy

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