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This is a comparison about Australian household energy use and Australian household greenhouse gas emission. In the using of the energy of Australian household, it seems the biggest percentage for using heating. It takes approximately 50%. Besides, it uses for water heating for 30%, refrigerator 7%, lighting 4%, cooling 2%, and the rest is for other applicants for 15%. They use for cooling only 2% and it is the smallest also. The greenhouse gas emission the biggest percentage used for water heating. It is holding 32 %, additionally it is used for refrigeration 14%, heating 15%, lighting 8%, cooling 3%, and the others appliances for 28%. It captures almost same with the using of water heater. The smallest of it is for cooling. It is only 3%. Both of them capture around 30 percentages for water heating. It proves water heating is a daily necessity among others.
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A comparison about Australian household energy use and Australian household greenhouse gas emission.
The Australian household energy usage. It seems the biggest percentage I used for heating. It takes approximately 50% of the energy. Some energy goes towards the following: heating up water is 30%, refrigerator is 7%, lighting is 4%, cooling is 2%, and the rest is for other appliances is 15%. They use only 2% for cooling.
The greenhouse gas emission. the biggest percentage is used for water heating, which it holds 32 % (of what?), additionally it is used for 14% of the refrigeration, 15% of the heating, 8% of the lighting , 3% cooling, and 28% for the other appliances. It is almost the same as the use of water heater. The smallest of it is for cooling, which is only 3%.
there are similarities with Australian household energy use compared to Australian household greenhouse gas emission. Both of them capture around 30 percentages for water heating. It proves water heating is a daily necessity.
NOtes: I juust rearranged things and reworded the areas with % in them to flow better. You should remember to have a topic and concludingsentence to each paragraph. You should try to add to the last paragraph. The highlighted party I wasn't sure wht that was of.
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It would be glad if anyone want to check it as a revise.
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