Translation of first part of a story I may never finish writting haha
Everything was so dark. I barely remember your eyes in front of me.
- Lucía – I whispered – I can’t distinguish between what is real and what is not, anymore. I need help.
- You have us – you said.
I shook my head no.
- I can’t stay. I would put you all at risk… I have to do it.
You were crying. So was I.
- Are you sure? – you asked.
I hugged you and didn’t aswer.
That's all. Would it be right "I can't distinguish anymore between ..."? And, what other ways to say "I shook my head no" are there? Thanks for the corrections and comments, good luck!
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Technically, a shake of a head could be a yes, but typically if something is well written you can tell if a shake means yes or no based on the context and how the writer set up the scene and finished the scene. However, to keep it more simple, a "shake" in my world means no and a, "nod" of a head means yes. In English we use, "XXXXXXX," quotation marks for dialogue when a character is speaking.
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That's intresating, how would you punctuate it? About the "shook my head", I added the "no" because I found examples where the same phrase (without the "no") was used as "I said yes with my head", is that an other possible interpretation of the phrase?
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The story is good though. I don't see anything that is incorrect with it, other than the punctuation, but that's not wrong, you punctuated it in the Spanish style.
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If you said,"I cant distinguish anymore between what is real and what is not," it would also be correct, you would just need to take off the "anymore" from the end of the sentence you have now. For example, if you say,"He shook his head," you don't necessarily have to add the "no" at the end, because the NO is implied.
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The title should say "Translation of THE first part ..." xD
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