It's not wronge my son
It's not wronge if you are diffrent among people who do'nt have aney precious thing .
You are not me you are the onley one you have to be .
Just be youself you are not an elf (all respect for them it's just likening)
Some people will say you can't and others it's banned they are like flies push them with your hand
Did you ever read number 1000000 number it's sex ziros and one . And you are the one who wil win ,so you will do it because you special my son .
God make is not to immitate we can creat
So imagine what you whant it will be elegant to make it real thing .
You are like aking you have every thing just use it and don't tang your sowrd untile you win and you will my son
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Just trying to find my way it's my frist peom
It will be great if you correct the note and tell me you opnion
Thank you
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It is difficult to correct poetry but I love the ideas you have here. I have made the basic corrections below. In some sections it is difficult to understand what you are trying to say so I apologise if I interpreted the poetic sense incorrectly!
Keep writing :)
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It's not wrong my son
It's not wrong if you are different among people who hold nothing precious.You are not me. You are the only one you have to be .
Just be yourself; you are not an elf (with all due respect)
Some people will say, "you can't" and others, "it's banned." They are like flies; push them away with your hand.
Did you ever read the number 1000000? It's six zeros and one. And you are the one who will win, because you are special my son .
God made us not to imitate; we can create.
So imagine what you want. It would be wondrous to make it reality.
Stop questioning what you have; just use it. Don't hang your sword until you win, and win you will, my son
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Just trying to find my way it's my first poem
It would be great if you could correct the note and let me know your opinion.
Thank you
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