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When I was living in Africa Africa, the only thing I knew about Africa was what I had seen in movies and news. I imagined that every thing was bad in those countries, in fact when I took the decision to go, all of my relatives and friends told me that I was crazy, arguments as "it's a dangerous place, you should think better, you shouldn't go", etc. At the end I went there, specifically Rwanda, such a nice place, a small country with a lot of needs but with amazing people, very polite, friendly, all the time trying to make you feel good. I was very surprised how that safety is that place, you cannot imagine, for example in Kigali, the main city, you can walk around at any time and nobody will rob you, I couldn't believe it when I was walking by the street at 11 o'clock pm and every thing was good, I did it for more than twice. As a tourist I got the opportunity to know two other countries, Tanzania and Kenya, both are nice places. The first has the best safari you can do, I did it and it was one of the best experiences I've ever had. In the second I just could visit Nairobi, its main city, is a big one I really liked it. It's kind chaotic because of the traffic but if you like to walk you can see it in a better way. With my experience living in Africa I learnt that we shouldn't let to be influenced for all the things that we just hear, is better if we find more information because all we see in the TV and news is not the true.

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When I was living in Africa

Africa, the only thing I knew about Africa was what I had seen in movies and news. I imagined that every thing was bad in those countries, in fact when I took made the decision to go, all of my relatives and friends told me that I was crazy, and made arguments such as "it's a dangerous place, you should think better, you shouldn't go", etc. At the end I went there, specifically Rwanda, such a nice place, a small country with a lot of needs but with amazing people, very polite, friendly, all the time trying to make you feel good. I was very surprised how safe that safety is that place, you cannot imagine, for example in Kigali, the main city, you can walk around at any time and nobody will rob you, I couldn't believe it when I was walking by the street at 11 o'clock pm and everything was good, I did it for more than twice.

As a tourist I got the opportunity to know two other countries, Tanzania and Kenya, both are nice places. The first has the best safari you can do, I did it and it was one of the best experiences I've ever had. In the second I just could visit Nairobi, its main city, which is a big one and I really liked it. It's kind of chaotic because of the traffic but if you like to walk you can see it in a better way.

With my experience living in Africa I learnt that we shouldn't let to allow ourselves to be influenced for by all the things that we just hear, it is better if we find more information because not all everything we see inon the TV and news is not the true.
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Your word choice and grammar (except what I mention below) is really great. Nice use of tenses ("was what I had seen" is perfect). One thing I'd work on is using periods (full stops) to break up thoughts, rather than using commas. Many of the sentences have "comma splices," which means that a comma is being used when a period should be.

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