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Please correct my essay. You had a very exiting evening yesterday. Recently I have studied very hard. And I really tired because of my study. But yesterday I had a very exiting evening. The other day I decided to throw a party to relax and spend a good time with my friends. So I invited all my friends. During the whole day I had been cleaning the flat and cooking dinner. Also I ordered a pizza and drinks. My friends came at 5 o'clock. We decided to watch a movie. When the movie was over everyone had already been hungry. So, while boys were playing the computer games, girls and I were laying the table. When everything was ready we sat at the table. We were talking, laughing and sharing impressions of the movie.Then we listend to music, sang and danced. We were very happy.

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Please correct my essay.

You had a very exiting evening yesterday.

Recently I have studied very hard. And I really tired because of my study. But yesterday I had a very exiting evening. The other day I decided to throw a party to relax and spend a good time with my friends. So I invited all my friends. During the whole day I had been cleaning the flat and cooking dinner. Also I ordered a pizza and drinks. My friends came at 5 o'clock. We decided to watch a movie. When the movie was over everyone had already been hungry. So, while boys were playing the computer games, girls and I were laying the table. When everything was ready we sat at the table. We were talking, laughing and sharing impressions of the movie.Then we listend to music, sang and danced. We were very happy.

 

You I had a very exciting evening yesterday.

Recently, I have been studying very hard. And I am really tired because of my studies, but yesterday I had a very exciting evening. The other day, I decided to throw a party to relax and spend a good time with my friends., so I invited all my friends of them. During the whole day I had been cleaning the flat and cooking dinner the whole day. Also I I also ordered a pizza and drinks. My friends came at 5 o'clock. We decided to watch a movie. When the movie was over, everyone had already been hungry. So, while the boys were playing the computer games, the girls and I were laying setting up the table. When everything was ready, we sat at the table. We were talking, laughing and sharing impressions of the movie. Then we listened to music, sang and danced. We were very happy.

 

Additions I have made are in blue.

Capitalization changes are in pink.

words switched around are in orange.

 

Your new paragraph would is:

 

I had a very exciting evening yesterday.

 

Recently, I have been studying very hard.  I am really tired because of my studies, but yesterday I had a very exciting evening.  The other day, I decided to throw a party to relax and spend a good time with my friends, so I invited all of them.  I had been cleaning the flat and cooking dinner the whole day.  I also ordered a pizza and drinks.  My friends came at 5 o'clock.  We decided to watch a movie.  When the movie was over, everyone had already been hungry.  So while the boys were playing computer games, the girls and I were setting up the table.  When everything was ready, we sat at the table.  We were talking, laughing and sharing impressions of the movie.  Then we listened to music, sang and danced.  We were very happy.

 

the word "exciting" always has a c after the x.

Your sentence structure is very good.  Some phrases were changed around in specific instances, such as using the word "also". 

 

For the word "study", if you have been doing it for some time, you use the suffix "ying", so it becomes "studying".

 

if it's completely past tense, such as "I studied hard", then you would use the suffix "ied" to make it "studied".

 

Other than that, your paragraph is great.  Keep practicing!

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