My Uncle

When i I was a little girl, my dad's older brother smoked a lot. He gave and he would give me money to buy cigarettes for him everyday. I was too young to know that smoking is very bad for your health untill he got cancer. I felt so sad when he died.

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- This is a good standard of written English Giselle Chen, well done!

- When I was a little girl, my dad's older brother smoked a lot and he would give me money to buy cigarettes for him everyday: You put this into two separate sentences initially but I have put them into one sentence. When reading this out loud, it flows better when they are put together. This is something that is hard to learn so with more practice you'll be able to. When you're writing in English, read what you have written out loud and see if it flows well.

- Just a couple of corrections such as 'I', 'cigarettes' and 'your'.

- Cigarettes: this is the plural word of cigarette. This means that there is more than one cigarette. In this case, your uncle would want cigarettes as he smoked a lot.

- English is a difficult language to learn, especially the fact that there are two different versions of English (American English and British English) so well done for practising your writing.

- Well done on your efforts. I hope you find my feedback constructive and helpful. If you have any questions, please get in touch.

My Uncle

When i was a little girl, my dad's older brother smoked a lot. He gave me money to buy cigarettes for him everyday. I was too young to know that smoking is very bad for your health untill he got cancer. I felt so sad when he died.