TOEFL iBT TRAINING - The money that the government uses

Nowadays the world is in crisis, politically in the political aspect. The money that are is with the politicals politicians have has a bad distibution distribution to the population and the basics aspects; like in the public health, education and others points (maybe 'areas' is better for this example). Some people in some contries thinks that the money should be used in new researches and technologies, but that and it is wrong, the main topic to use the money is to stop the many problems that the society lives (we can say 'society has' or 'society lives in').
In Brazil, for example, we (if 'we' is too informal you can say 'the country has') have a universal health 's system where everyone that needs help can go to the hospital to be attended in at the same time. The idea of the public health is prefect perfect but the hospitals don't have money to solve the patients problems because the government didn't pass the money to them. We know that the money exists but the population don't doesn't know where is it.
Education is other ('the other problem' or 'another problem') problem in many countries. The children don't receive the best of the knowledges just because they don't pay to study. Moreover, this these students that didn't don't pay for the school should have the same education of as the others that pay much (you can say 'a lot of') money for that. Clearly the difference between the poor people and the rich people is startling in the education system.
Therefore the education and the health is impaired because of how the money is distributed. The population can do something to change this situation. We can fight against the corruption and require demand our rights. In summary, the money that the govern receives should be used to resolve primary the basics troubles in the society first.

Hi Thais, this is a very good piece. I have tried to correct some words and phrases to sound more like something a native English speaker might say. I have a feeling you will also get lots of different suggestions as there are some things that can be said in many different ways. Please let me know if you have any questions, good luck with your TOEFL. Hope this helps, all the best :)