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The First Time We have a lot of the first time in our life, for example the first cooking, the first washing the clothes, the first time going to school, the first time traveling…. Of course, that’s unforgettable and precious memory. Today, I would like to share my first time to travel Shenzhen, a beautiful city, by myself. When I was a twelve-year-old girl, I sudden want to visit the Shenzhen and I tell my parents soon and that they unexpectedly agree with my advise. However, they are too busy to accompany me to tour, and I have to go to there alone. That’s crazy for me, because I never went to some other city except my home town at that time. So I was nervous and afraid. In addition, there are many problem occurring my head, such as how can I get there? what should I do? who can I find to help me and so on. I am so fearful that I daren’t set out on my journey. My mother tell me just clam down and going and she urge me set off quickly without distracting thought. So, I have to carry on my plan about traveling. And fantastically, I found it’s different form my thought before I went to Shenzhen and it’s easy, even though I do meet a lot of difficult. I firstly found a hotel and live according to my parents suggestion and then I just do a plan every day to carry on. When I fallen a trouble, asking for help to my parents or local civilians. After solving the problem, just continuing my plan. During the time, I was happy and meaningful, which is also my one of the most precious memory on my life. Through this experience of traveling, to be honest, I learn a lot. Considering many thing for future, it’s naturally feel uneasy and scared. In many cases, our worried isn’t the trouble or difficult rather than unknown of future. In fact, we can’t control what happen in the next moment. Don’t think too much, just doing following your heart.

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thanks!
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well if you are talking about something that happened in past, its better to use simple past tense.
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Please point out where my mistakes are and show me a better way to express it when its not good as if they are in Chinglish. Thanks! (^-^)

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