Western Fast Food

这是我们某次考试的作文，我把我写的写在这里，请大家指正，谢谢！ 
1，洋快餐颇受中国消费者的青睐； 2，产生这种现象的原因； 3，我的看法 

As we all know,_western fast food is very popular among Chinese people, especially for Chinese children. Then You must (better with: may) ask why. 

Of course,_one of the most major (or: key) factors is delicious the (great) taste._So,_children like it very much. 

But (or: However,) why do adults also like it ? They know that it is contains less little nutrition and it can cause fat .

In my opinion Well,_nowadays the life style is very fast,_and we even can not even catch up with it . To save time, more and more persons (better with: people) choose the fast food. 

On the other hand (better with: In addition),_I think the ads advertising is also a factor._We can easily find an ad advertisements about fast food ---_like KFC_---_on (the) TV.  And the ads These advertisements are often (very) attractive, and they These ads make persons (better with: people) want to enter it try their products (or: try the fast food).

Therefore, in my opinion (or: in my point of view), the taste (or: deliciousness),_the ads advertising, 
_and the fast life fast pace of life,_all of these I think are the reasons for why we like fast food.