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Dora Wen
My troublesome brother I have a younger brother, who is sentimental and needs a lot of love. We have a five years difference in age. He enrolls in the university this month, and lives in dormitory there. My parents hoped he could learn how to be independent, so they required him to take a short-term job to earn the fare of his scooter in this summer vacation. However, because he failed in a few subjects, he had to spend one month to retake them to reach the threshold of graduation. When he finished his classes, there was only one month left for him to work, so he had no choice but to distribute the flyers from house to house. Although the job needed a great deal of strength and the salary was extremely small, my mom insisted him and encouraged him to work hard. She told me that she was very sympathetic to my brother, but she could not allow him to hide the leaflet he hadn’t finished to pass out. Once he forms a bad habit, it’s by no means easy to get rid of it. We did not care about how much he earn, but wanted him to be responsible to his own life; nevertheless, my brother was in essence a trouble-maker. He has had two car accidents in this month. One was he had not enough time to brake the scooter to bump other’s car; the other was he fell off the scooter with his friend on the back seat. All his income wasn’t enough to compensate the victim and repair my father’s scooter, so my parents had to expend their savings. Therefore, I’m very happy for my brother’s not at home now, as I don’t have to worry about him. However, dream is only a dream. This is pie in the sky. My brother is still in the grip of amnesia, so I still often receive his emergent call. I hope this is his accommodation period, and I could retire from his secretary soon.

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My troublesome brother

I have a younger brother, who is sentimental and needs a lot of love. We have a five years difference in age. He enrolled in the university this month, and lives in a dormitory there.

My parents hoped that he could learn how to be independent, so they required him to take a short-term job to earn the fare/expenses/upkeep for his scooter in this summer vacation. However, because he failed in a few subjects, he had to spend one month to retake/resit them to reach the threshold of graduation. When he finished his resits, there was only one month left for him to work, so he had no choice but to distribute the flyers from house to house for the meantime.

Although the job needed a great deal of strength/energy (the job was tedious) and the salary was extremely small/little, my mom insisted it on him and encouraged him to work hard. Eventhough she told me that she was very sympathetic towards my brother having this job, but she  would still not allow him to hide the leaflets that he could not managed pass out. Once he forms/develops a bad habit, it’s by no means easy to get rid of it.

We did not care about how much he earned, but we just wanted him to be responsible for his own life;  my brother, in essence a trouble-maker,would still be one nevertheless.

 He had( had) two car accidents in this month. The first happened when he had not enough time to brake his scooter and bumped into another car car; the other when  he fell off his scooter with his friend on the back seat. All his income wasn’t enough to compensate the victim and repair my father’s scooter, so my parents had to expend/pay out from their savings.

Therefore, I’m very happy that my brother is not at home now since I don’t have to worry about him. However,my dream is only a dream , like hoping for a pie in the sky because my brother is still in the grip of amnesia/denial, and I still often receive his urgent calls. I hope this is only a transition/ accommodation period, and I could retire from being his secretary/caretaker soon.

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My Troublesome Brother

I have a younger brother, who is sentimental* and needs a lot of love. We have a five years difference in age. He enrolls in the university this month, and lives in the dormitory there.
* ? who has special needs in terms of his emotional development
My parents hoped he could learn how to be independent, so they made/required him to take a short-term job, to earn the fare cost/price of his scooter during/in this summer vacation. However, because he failed in a few subjects, he had to spend one month to retake them to reach the threshold of* graduation. When/By the time he had finished his classes, there was only one month left for him to work, so he had no choice but to distribute the flyers from house to house.
*to fulfil the requirements for graduation
Although the job needed a great deal of stamina/[strength] and the salary was extremely small, my mom insisted, him and encouraged him to work hard. She told me that she was very sympathetic to my brother, but she could not allow him to hide the leaflets that he hadn’t finished distributing/to pass out. Once he forms a bad habit, it’s by no means easy to lose/get rid of it.

We did not care about how much he earned, but wanted him to be responsible to for his own life; nevertheless, my brother was in essence a trouble-maker. He has had two car accidents in this month. One was when he had did not have enough time to brake the scooter to and bumped another’s car; the other was when he fell off the scooter with his friend on the back seat. All his income wasn’t enough to compensate the victim, and repair my father’s scooter, so my parents had to use expend their savings.

Therefore, I’m very happy for that my brother’s not at home now, as I don’t have to worry about him. However, a dream is only a dream. This is pie in the sky. My brother is still in the grip of amnesia, so I still often receive his emergencyt call. I hope this is his accommodation period, and I will be able to/ can could retire (soon) from being his secretary soon.

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Мой непутевый брат

У меня есть младший брат, кто(он) сентиментален и нуждается в большой любви. У нас пять лет разницы в возрасте. Он обучается в университете в этом месяце, и живет там в общежитии.

Мои родители надеялись, что он может научиться быть независимыми, поэтому они требуют его занять краткосрочную работу, чтобы заработать на билет его скутер в летние каникулы. Однако, поскольку он не смог в несколько предметов, он должен был провести один месяц пересдать их, чтобы достичь порога окончания школы. Когда он закончил свои занятия, там был только один месяц оставили для него, чтобы работать, поэтому у него не было выбора, кроме как распространять листовки от дома к дому.

Хотя работа требуется немало сил и зарплата была очень маленькая, моя мама настояла ним и предложил ему потрудиться. Она сказала мне, что она была очень отзывчивые к моему брату, но она не могла позволить ему спрятать листовку он не закончил в обморок. Однажды он формирует плохую привычку, это не так-то просто избавиться от него.

Нас совершенно не волнует сколько он зарабатывает, но ему хотелось, чтобы нести ответственность за свою жизнь; тем не менее, мой брат был по сути смутьяна. У него были две аварии в этом месяце. Один был у него не было достаточно времени, чтобы затормозить скутер врезаться другой автомобиль, другой оказался он упал с самоката со своим другом на заднем сиденье. Всех его доходов было недостаточно, чтобы возместить жертвы и ремонт моего отца скутер, так что моим родителям пришлось тратить свои сбережения.

Поэтому, я очень рад за моего брата нет дома сейчас, как я не придется беспокоиться о нем. Тем не менее, мечта-это только мечта. Это журавль в небе. Мой брат все еще находится в тисках амнезия, поэтому я до сих пор часто получать его эмерджентных звонок. Я надеюсь, что это является его проживание период, и я мог выбыть из его секретарша скоро.

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