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HELP ME WITH MY IELTS WRITING Some people think museum should be enjoyable places to attract and entertain young people.Other think the purpose of museum is to educate not to entertain.Discuss both sides and give your own opinion. Many people chose to spend their leisure time in visiting museums which provide cozy environment and entertainments, while other people consider museums as educational places.In my opinion, it is more important for modern museums to multiple their operation modes rather than just displaying items. With colorful display methods, a museum is more likely to attract young people.For example, in some science and technology museums,more and more people are attracted by the interesting high-tech inventions,such as 3D-printer and AI robots which can actively interact with the young visitors.In this case,they may have more opportunities to rich their minds in the museums. On the other hand, there is no doubt that one of the purposes to establish museums is to educate young people.Take some history or art museum for example,young people are able to learn more background knowledge about the displays directly through the original commentary written by the experts.Whereas the enjoyable museums are likely to distract young people’s attention from the historical and cultural significance of the precious items. Personally, I think it is necessary for the modern museums to arise young people’s interests through arranging more vivid exhibitions.The main reason is that people tend to learn things more effectively when they are in a enjoyable places.Thus the meanings given by the modern museums become profound, which may change the way that young people learn. In conclusion, although education is important to the aim of museums, people should pay more attention on how to make visiting museums fun, which can help young people learn more knowledge from the museums.

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HELP ME WITH MY IELTS WRITING

Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to that attract and entertain young people.  Others think the purpose of a museum is to educate, not to entertain.  Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Many people choose to spend their leisure time in visiting museums which provide cozy environments and entertainments, while other people consider museums as educational places.  In my opinion, it is more important for modern museums to multiple introduce new ways of their operation modes rather than just displaying items.

With colorful display methods, a museum is more likely to attract young people.  For example, in some science and technology museums, more and more people are attracted by the interesting high-tech inventions, such as 3D-printers and AI robots which can actively interact with the young visitors.  In this case type of museum , they people may have more opportunities to enrich their minds in the museums.

On the other hand, there is no doubt that one of the main purposes to establish of museums is to educate young people.  Take some a history or art museum for example, young people are able to learn more background knowledge about the displays directly through the original commentary written by the experts. Whereas the more enjoyable museums are might be more likely to distract young people’s attention from the historical and cultural significance of the precious items.

Personally, I think it is necessary for the modern museums to arise build young people’s interests through by arranging more vivid exhibitions.  The main reason is that people tend to learn things more effectively when they are in a enjoyable places.  Thus the meanings given knowledge presented by the modern museums becomes more profound, which may change the way that young people learn.

In conclusion, although education is an important to the aim of museums, people should pay more attention on about how to make visiting museums fun, which can may help young people learn more knowledge from the museums them.

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HELP ME WITH MY IELTS WRITING

Some people think museums should be enjoyable places to attract and entertain young people.Others think the purpose of museums are to educate, not to entertain. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Many people choose to spend their leisure time visiting museums which provide a cozy environment and entertainment. While other people consider museums as educational places. In my opinion, it is more important for modern museums to multiply their operation modes rather than just displaying items.

With colorful display methods, a museum is more likely to attract young people. For example, in some science and technology museums, more and more people are attracted by the interesting high-tech inventions, such as a 3D-printer and AI robots which can actively interact with the young visitors. In this case, they may have more opportunities to enrich their minds in the museums.

On the other hand, there is no doubt that one of the purposes of establishing museums is to educate young people. Take a history or art museum for example, young people are able to learn more background knowledge about the displays directly through the original commentary written by the experts. Whereas the enjoyable museums are likely to distract young people’s attention from the historical and cultural significance of the precious items.

Personally, I think it is necessary for the modern museums to arise young people’s interests through arranging more vivid exhibitions. The main reason is that people tend to learn things more effectively when they are in enjoyable places. Thus, the meanings given by the modern museums become profound, which may change the way that young people learn.

In conclusion, although education is important to the aim of museums, people should pay more attention on how to make visiting museums fun, which can help young people learn more knowledge from the museums.

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