First Day

Dear diary:
This is the first time that I write on you. I've written a few diaries before, but I am not pleased with them. Now, I decided to write another diary, which is you, so don't let me down! I'm very excited, because two more days and I'll be on my way to WuYiShan! I have never been to there before, so I'm looking forward to this trip. And I will take you with me, writing down every days I spent. Now, I should stop, cause I am going to have a pillow fight with my dad. Good night!

Dear Diary,  

This is the first time that I am writing to you. I've written a few diaries before, but I have not been pleased with them. [we don't really say "to be pleased with" anymore, I think its older English. You could say instead "I didn't really like them" "I didn't find them interesting."] Now, I have decided to write another diary, which is you, so don't let me down! I'm very excited, because in two more days I'll be on my way to Mt. Wuyi! I have never been there before, so I'm looking forard to this trip. I will take you with me and write down how I spend every day. For now, I should stop writing, because I am going to have a pillow fight with my Dad. Good night!