Write about my home town

My home town is located under the Han river. I have lived there for almost 15 years. First when I When I first moved here, I was middle school student. First My first impression was that it was very cold and strange. My family tried to grow accustomed new city. 

In the winter, the landscape of my city and school gave me cold images. However, as it became the spring, I got used to my home town, And then I could was able to meet a lot of good people.

The most different thing between my hometown and other area is that there are too many academy academies in my hometown. Specially My hometown is famous for education. Usually parents who live in here, want to make their kids smart. Sometimes because of parents, students have a lot of stress. at the late time at night, We can meet easily meet young students on the street.

And there are many good restaurants and a very good nice park in my hometown. There is one of a long stream: Yang- Jea stream. We could can enjoy outdoor activities in there. For examples, soccer, tennis, running and walking a your dog. There are many pet lovers. And there are unique bathrooms. The Its shaped looks like a rocket. If you open the door of the bathroom, you can listen the hear classical music, Yang-Jea stream is one of the must places you must go if you visit my hometown.

{Your English is really good~ I just changed a couple things to make your English sound more natural. No major mistakes. Keep up the great work! ^_^*}