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Formal writing practice 1: A letter to help new undergraduate students Dear website director, The purpose of this email is providing my opinion about the advices which should appear in the website that you manage as it has been requested. I would like to help in improving the available information for new students since I have felt the confusion of being a new-year student and being absolutely lost about everything related with university life. First of all, the importance of having achieved some skills before the university starts is undeniable. Those skills include listening for some hours without stopping paying attention, taking notes and summarizing them, sometimes even simultaneously. It may seem obvious that students at this level of education have those abilities, but some students reach the marks needed to enter the university just learning subjects by heart. That is absolutely impossible at university, sometimes because the subjects are too broad or even sometimes because it does not exist a written text to be studied. However mentioned academic skills are indispensable, life skills can be even more for new students because, if they are not got, it may lead the student to anxiety, depression and some other mental issues that can not only hamper the academic development of the student, but also his health. For that reason is important to choose a well-located place to live. While picking a residence or apartment near the university can be the first-thought option, it may be a better choice a place where you can enjoy yourself after classes and meet other people. Making friends is also an important question. In that order joining a club or playing collective sports can be useful, but just speaking with the class mates at the end of the class or on the breaks can be just enough at the beginning to start sharing other activities non-related with academics. At last but not least, finances will be a never affronted problem for most of the new students. However, it does not have to be a problem thanks to the scholarships offered by the national and regional government, as well as by the university itself. Whether you dispose of a high or a small amount of money, having a detailed control of how it is wasted and how much is left in every moment can help reaching the payday. So in conclusion university life is not easy as it prepares people for adult life. Nevertheless, the previous hints will surely make it more affordable, so they cannot be missing from your website.

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Formal writing practice 1: A letter to help new undergraduate students

Dear website director,
The purpose of this email is providing to provide [/to share] my opinion about [/regarding*1] the advices which that should appear in the website that you manage, as it has been requested in response to the requests you made on the site[*2]. I would like to help in improving the available information for new students, since I have felt [/experienced] [", first hand," / ", personally,"]  the confusion of being a new-year student and being absolutely lost about everything related with university life.


First of all, the importance of having achieved some skills before the university starts starting university is undeniable [huge / difficult to overstate*3]. Those Such skills include listening for some several hours without stopping paying attention [/losing focus], taking notes and summarizing them: sometimes even simultaneously. It may seem obvious that students at this level of education have those abilities, but some students reach the marks needed to enter the university just [by] learning subjects by heart. 

 

*1: "Regarding" has a slightly more formal tone to it and I think it's very slightly more appropriate for letters / emails of this sort. 

 

*2: I wasn't entirely sure of the situation this was in his response to, but I assume that you mean you're writing to him in response to his own requests for input into what advice he should offer.


*3: Various synonyms for 'big' will probably work here. In my eyes, "undeniable" seems a little out of place here, and maybe something like "insurmountable" would work well if you want to keep a similar sound to the sentence.


Apologies for only making it partway through, and hopefully overs will help to go over the rest and / or offer other approaches to the section I've already corrected. 

 

I don't think there were any actual grammatical errors that needed correcting as far as I went, so what I did was mainly to smooth out some aspects of your phrasing, (e.g. using the infinitive "to provide" instead of the present participle, "providing"), or make the use of language a little more formal. Even some of my changes are likely to be disputed by other native speakers, which just goes to show how amazing your English really is! :)

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