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My IELTS essay 2. It is true to say that becoming a good member of society is a rough task for a child. But whose task is it, first of all, to teach and direct a child: children’s parents or school? To begin with, parents are, undoubtedly, major people in any child’s life. They spend most time together during first several years. Moreover, mothers and fathers help their child to learn essential things about how the world is arranged. Besides, a child always takes an example after his parents, so these people are mostly responsible for his developing personality. Every step they take should be measured and thought twice. On the other hand, when a child gets older, there is school, which takes a hefty part of his everyday life. That’s another new world, where he or she learns how to get acquainted with other children, make friends and be in touch with them. Teachers at school are people who replace parents, while a child is at the lesson. As a result, these people have a huge influence on kids. Needless to say, school is responsible not only for children’s success in studies, but for their personality advancement as well. Personally, I believe that both these sides, parents and school, have almost equal duties in front of a child, because their interference is simultaneous and massive. Nevertheless, I give the first place to moms and dads, because it is in a circle of their interest to raise a good member of a society and above all a kind and a truly good man. (259)

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My IELTS essay 2.

It is true to say that becoming a good member of society is a tough task for a child. But whose task is it to teach and direct a child: children’s parents or school's?
To begin with, parents are, undoubtedly, major people in any child’s life. They spend the most time with their children during their first years. Moreover, mothers and fathers help their child to learn essential things about the world. Besides, a child always takes an example from his parents, so these people are mostly responsible for developing the child's personality. Every step they take should be measured and thought about twice.
On the other hand, when a child gets older, there is school, which takes a hefty part of his everyday life. It’s another new world, where he or she learns how to get acquainted with other children, make friends and interact with them. Teachers are the people who take on the parents role while the child is at school. As a result, these people have a huge influence on kids. Needless to say, school is responsible not only for children’s success in studies but for developing their personality as well.
Personally, I believe that both parties, parents and school, have almost equal duties towards of a child because their involvement is simultaneous and massive. Nevertheless, the ultimate responsibility belongs to mums and dads, because it is in their interest to raise a good member of a society and above all a kind and truly good person. (259)

 

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