IELTS - General Writing Task I - Letter to friend

TASK:

An English-speaking friend wants to spend a two-week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter:

offer to find somewhere to stay
give advice about what to do
give information about what clothes to bring

Write at least 150 words.

ANSWER:

Dear Susan!

I am delighted to hear, that you are going to visit Vienna!

There are many things I can  (would rather than can) recommend (that) you should to do. Most of all, you should visit Palace Schoenbrunn. It is ranked on the fourth position of as the forth the most popular hotspots in Europe. If you like classical music, the National Opera House has an excellent reputation.

When it comes to your accommodation, the preferred choice is the Hilton Hotel. Its location is really central, (Alternative: It is located in the centre/er of Vienna and) the first district is within walking range(distance), . This hotel is also while it is located directly adjacent to Vienna's city park. at the same time. It is not the cheapest hotel with rooms around , though, with round about 120€ per night. As an alternative, I (would) recommend
the youth hostel "Backpacker's Paradise". Also very centrally located, this one is (costs) just 60€ per night. For both locations, you would have to make a reservation one month ahead of your arrival.

July is really the best time to come here, good choice! But speaking of summer time, you should know, that Vienna can become be quite warm during that period. So bring your summer clothes along! (you could delete: along) 

I can't say how much I am looking forward to meeting (seeing rather than meeting*) you then! It is so exciting, that you finally can make it!

All the best,
Jens-Christian

* in this sentence - using the word meeting implies that you have never met this person before, where as seeing implies that you are seeing them again.  

REMARKS:
207 words, 20 minutes.
Misspelled words: directly, backpacker, preferred

Please rate this text according to
- task achievement, You covered the main points required.  
- coherence and cohesion, It was easy to follow and made sense.  You probably could have simplified the sentences a little when describing Vienna and it would be more clear.  
- lexical resource
- and grammar range and accuracy. I would suggest when making recommendations to use "would recommend" - it is more polite. An alternative would be to say should, e.g., Vienna has many great attractions, but you really should see the Schoenbrunn Palace. It is ...  The comments that I have suggested are minor and the text as it stands is completely understandable.   Thanks!