Smartphones – A great invention?

Currently, there are more than one thousand million billion smartphone users in the world. This number is almost over the computer. There are various ways to say this:

The best way would be 'This number almost exceeds the number of computer users'.

However, do you think is it a great invention? From my point of view, there are both advantages and disadvantages.

Firstly, now you can revise check your email or social networking site anytime, anywhere.

It sounds more natural to say 'you can now...'

For instance, Facebook, or Instagram. You’re able to get in touch with people nearly 24/7. A few years ago, it was impossible. The second advantage is that, if you want, you can use it to play music or watch a film or television. It is great when you are travelling by train or plane, because the journey/trip is less boring.

We generally use the word way to speak about 'the way to get somewhere' - i.e. when asking for directions, when we are going 'the wrong way' or when we're talking about distance, e.g. 'It was a long way to travel by car.'

Thirdly, if that weren’t enough, there are apps for practically everything. Now your phone is also an ebook reader, currency converter, and handheld gaming device. There are even apps that help you learn foreign languages!

However, there also some disadvantages. For instance, too many people have their eyes and fingers glued to their mobile device, instead of interacting with the people around them. They ignore face-to-face conversation for virtual ones.

Besides all this, it can actually cost lives when drivers focused on texting or social media lose control of their vehicle and have major accidents.

Besides would be the word to use if we were reflecting on something already said.  Since you are adding some additional information, it is better to say 'Besides all this'.

In conclusion, if we don't use better this kind of advance, it runs the risk of becoming a huge problem for society.

I'm not sure what you mean with the underlined part!  We can discuss this!

Fernando,

All in all, this is a very impressive piece of writing, which I really enjoy.  I found your article very interesting and I certainly agree with many of the things.  It drives me mad when I go for a dinner with friends and they spend their time with their mobile phones.  I generally put mine on silent if I'm out for a meal or doing something with friends and put it somewhere that I can't see it.  Recently I was waiting for a plane in Gatwick Airport and the flight was delayed for an hour and a half.  It amazed me how people, groups of friends and family members were totally ignoring each other the majority of the time in preference of using their phones!  At one stage I noticed that virtually everyone in the queue for the plane was on their mobile phone.

Anyway, excellent job!  Keep up the good work.

Leigh

Smartphones – A great invention?

Currently, there are more than one billion smartphone users in the world. This number is almost higher  the number of computer users. However, do you think is it a great invention? From my point of view, there are both advantages and disadvantages.

Firstly, now you can review your email or social networking site anytime, everywhere. For instance, Facebook, or Instagram. You’re able to get in touch with people nearly 24/7. A few years ago, it was impossible. The second advantage is that, if you want, you can use it for playing music or watching a film or television. It is great when you are travelling by train or plane, because the trip is less boring. Thirdly, if that weren’t enough, there are apps for practically everything. Now your phone is also an ebook reader, currency converter, and handheld gaming device. There are even apps that help you learn foreign languages!

However, there also some disadvantages. For instance, too many people have their eyes and fingers glued to their mobile device, instead of interacting with the people around them. They ignore face-to-face conversation for virtual ones. Besides, it can actually cost lives when drivers focused on texting or social media lose control of their vehicle and have major accidents.

In conclusion, if we don't use better this technology, it runs the risk of becoming a huge problem for society.