combined education VS. single-sex education (looks a lot like an IELTS topic! :) )

There is a hot issue brewing in education about combined education or single-sex education - which one can facilitates studying of students and be is better to for their students' future. It’s causing quite a stir. I would like to discuss both the two main views as follows.

There are some advantages in separate segregated schools. Supporters of single-sex education believe that students are easier to acquire knowledge more easily, and gain higher academic success for because they can concentrate on study without interference/distractions from the other sex. They are free from harassment and bullying, particularly the boys toward the girls/of girls by boys. Furthermore/Moreover, in single-sex schools, students can get more individual attention from their teachers. Boys and girls have different learning styles. If student are divided into different gender group, teachers can teach them at their own pace and level of ability, so separate/segregated education can cater for more better in these respects.

Positive impacts from/Advantages of/Benefits of combined/integrated education are that, because of the different sexes have different advantages/skills in study or working, they can raise awareness of which fields they are or are not good at or not in earlier in their education ages, when they by competinglete with the opposite sex. It is good preparation for students’ adult life. Furthermore/In addition, it is essential that students learn how to socialize at young an early age. If students are in a mixed school, they get used to being around the opposite sex and learn how to deal with relationships and other people better (good). Cooperation and competition is something we have to educate them about.

I am an advocate for the idea that boys and girls benefit more from studying at co-ed schools. As we all know, students learn much more in schools more than things just academic subjects like math and science. It is in mixed school where that students learn to interact with others and to deal with conflicts. Single-sex schools fail to provide a real social environment, so students there lack the realistic preparation for society.

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Some was expressed well, some was a little clumsy; overall not to bad, but it is six-ish in (<>6) IELTS